The Habit for Eating, Ceremony, Wedding Include Costume, Traditional Food, Dance in My Hometown
I come from South East of Kendari City. In Kendari the people are kind, tender, care to other person and stranger to stay in village. In Kendari is save many beautiful places, example “Wanuamonapa” and famous place is Kendari beach. In Kendari beach you can enjoy and very interested because the place so beautiful you can see a beach and sunset the afternoon and then person come to Kendari Beach for enjoy place with friend, family and etc. The beach is divided and you can sit-down on the chair while eat or see sight.
Eating habit in Kendari is sago. Sago is very famous. You can make for cake, flour and substitute rice with sago. Because sago many carbohydrate appeal rice. Usually sago for eating person original but stranger example Javanese like it. You can eat for anything but you can often take a pee because, sago program many water. But that is good for body you can eat with fish and vegetable, chili or salt you can mixture in your plate.
Ceremony in Kendari usually make for wedding party, for leader to hometown and decline of nobility. Often use traditional dance example mondotambe for wedding party often use molulo. In the wedding party the other person look for couple for dance molulo after that neck n neck and together dance faith movement foot and hand. If you join you can happy because this is funny and noisy. You can enjoy the party after that wedding party in Kedari, in the night “Molulo” and competion for children. The place is field with lamp bright.
Costume in Kendari is “babu ngawi lipa hinuru” use for dance to support performance and for wedding party. After that use the costume you must use earing and neck last is noisy same as vintage. Traditional food in Kendari is sago. Sago is program water. You can make with water hot after that scratch until sago ripe. And often term “Sinonggi”. Sinonggi is very famous in Kendari but in Makassar there is sago but the name is “Kapurung” you can make with mixture salt, soup fish, and vegetable different as Kendari. The dance of Kendari is Mondotambe and Molulo many dance in Kendari.
In Kendari many habit and culture until now still use it. And not move and not change to other culture. Next use and everlasting that not extinct replacement other culture or Barat culture.
Sentence: In Kendari is save many beautiful places, example Wanuamonapa and famous place is Kendari beach.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and save
because the place so beautiful you can see a beach and sunset the afternoon and then person come to Kendari Beach for enjoy place with friend
because the place is so beautiful you can see a beach and sunset at the afternoon and then person comes to Kendari Beach for enjoying place with friend
Sentence: Usually sago for eating person original but stranger example Javanese like it.
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Sentence: But that is good for body you can eat with fish and vegetable, chili or salt you can mixture in your plate.
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Suggestion: Refer to can and mixture
Sentence: If you join you can happy because this is funny and noisy.
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Suggestion: Refer to can and happy
Sentence: The place is field with lamp bright.
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Suggestion: Refer to lamp and bright
Sentence: After that use the costume you must use earing and neck last is noisy same as vintage.
Description: The fragment is noisy same is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace noisy with adverb
Sentence: Sinonggi is very famous in Kendari but in Makassar there is sago but the name is Kapurung you can make with mixture salt, soup fish, and vegetable different as Kendari.
Description: The fragment is sago but is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace sago with adjective
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Suggestion: Refer to vegetable and different
Sentence: You can enjoy the party after that wedding party in Kedari, in the night Molulo and competion for children.
Error: competion Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: After that use the costume you must use earing and neck last is noisy same as vintage.
Error: earing Suggestion: No alternate word
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