Benton City residents have adopted healthier lifestyles. A recent survey of city residents shows that the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. During those ten years, local sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol, have increased fourfold, while sales of sulia, a food rarely eaten by the healthiest residents, have declined dramatically. Because of these positive changes in the eating habits of Benton City residents, we predict that the obesity rate in the city will soon be well below the national average.
The author of the argument claims that obesity rate of the city will soon become less than national average rate and provided the reason to the claim by positing the positive changes in the eating habits of benotn city residents. To support the conclusion the author cited various evidences given by surveys that firstly seems to bolster the author's argument, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. Author's assumptions failed to hold the ground on conclusion due to following reasons;
Firstly, the author provided that recent survey of the city residents which shows the conformation of the eating habits of people to that with government's nutritional recommendations, this survey compared the present eating habits to those were of ten years ago. Which is the very long time for comparing one thing to other because many things had been changed over such a long period of time, like some vegetables might be available to people ten years ago but not now, or the production of many crops may have stopped to changes in climatic condition or people may have found something better over that. secondly statistic data has not been provided,i.e. on how many people survey has conducted or in which part of city survey was conducted.
Secondly,the authors said that increase in the sales of the product containing kiran, which have the substance that reduces the chalestrol have increased many fold. This assumption seems to be true at first, but increase in the sales of product may be due to myriad of people having the problem of increasing chelestrol level in their body not because of people becoming health conscious.
Last but not least, the author said that decrease in sales of sulia, which was eaten by most of the healthy person has decreased which means people are not consuming food that leads to obesity. It may not be true sales of sulia may have decreased may due to changes in the taste of product,people may don't like it's taste or something more tastier than sulia had come in the market or may be due to changes in price, it might had become more costlier that many people were not able to purchase it. Thus was not the valid assumption for the argument.
In sum, the author needs to provide more specific evidences like number of people on which survey was conducted etc. He Should compile more specific and vaildated reasons due to which health of the city residents has improved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86829268293 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51852860172 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482926829268 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.4012659695 57.8364921388 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.333333333 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.1666666667 23.324526521 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20039360744 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810297007769 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963692020814 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112791409925 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887923859914 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.3550499002 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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