Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors.
Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30
percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student
achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its
graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Omega university is planning to terminate the student evaluation of professors. This procedure is being considered responsible for lesser recruitment of Omega students. From the time the procedure has come into effect,there has been a rise in student grades dramatically. This sudden rise in grades is negatively influencing the recruiters as they are seeing it as an inflation and not rise in actual student education quality. Additionally, more number of Alpha graduates are being hired as compared to Omega graduates. Although, at first glance the argument may seem cogent, but it is rife with loop holes and questionable assumptions.
The author posits that since the implementation of the teacher evaluation procedure professors are assigning higher grades to students. The overall rise in the grade averages has been 30 percent. However, on closely analyzing this data one can see that a 30 percent increase over 15 years is not such a drastic change. At the same time, it is quite possible that within this same period some other changes where implemented. For example: addition of new teaching personnel, a change in course of study, increased number of teaching hours, adoption of new teaching styles. Any of these changes could also have the exact same effect. However, the author has overlooked to mention any other changes during the fifteen year period in this argument.
Building on the same lines of increased grades, the author mentions that the employers are looking at this rise as inflation. But, it is not clear whether it is author's opinion as to how the employers are perceiving the current scenario or the actual perspective of the recruiters that has been mentioned in this argument. Thus, the validity of this evidence is flimsy. Even if that is not the case, more concrete data as to whether all the employers have this opinion or only a few have expressed this opinion must be mentioned.
Additionally, the author mentions more Alpha graduates getting hired as compared to Omega graduates. Such comparison requires that everything that is common and uncommon between the two universities be thoroughly analysed. For example: the number of teachers, the number of students, the teaching style, the number of employers visiting each university, etc. Only, after considering all such points can an actual comparison be made. Thereafter, we will get
a true picture regarding the current status of employment rate of both universities.
In sum, unless this argument is supported by valid and more reliable evidences, it cannot be used by the author to convince the Omega University to stop the teacher evaluation by students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e student evaluation of professors. This procedure is being considered responsibl...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
... time the procedure has come into effect,there has been a rise in student grades drama...
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Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...hat is not the case, more concrete data as to whether all the employers have this opinion or ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...parison be made. Thereafter, we will get a true picture regarding the current sta...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...top the teacher evaluation by students.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'thus', 'as to', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259414225941 0.25644967241 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.154811715481 0.15541462614 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0899581589958 0.0836205057962 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0460251046025 0.0520304965353 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0167364016736 0.0272364105082 61% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129707112971 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0690376569038 0.0416121511921 166% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.86637967013 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0188284518828 0.026700313972 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.127615062762 0.113004496875 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0146443514644 0.0255425247493 57% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00836820083682 0.0127820249294 65% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2662.0 2731.13054187 97% => OK
No of words: 428.0 446.07635468 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.21962616822 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.397196261682 0.378187486979 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.31308411215 0.287650121315 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.238317757009 0.208842608468 114% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.163551401869 0.135150697306 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86637967013 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 207.018472906 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507009345794 0.469332199767 108% => OK
Word variations: 57.0271263234 52.1807786196 109% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.6086956522 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3272152045 57.7814097925 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.739130435 141.986410481 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6086956522 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.521739130435 0.724660767414 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 49.9171068671 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.10576923077 1.8405768891 114% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312579602626 0.441005458295 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0818596474164 0.135418324435 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0677674751539 0.0829849096947 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.499433526931 0.58762219726 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.205408612622 0.147661913831 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112738211693 0.193483328276 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634713983927 0.0970749176394 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.296902142358 0.42659136922 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.14712790541 0.0774707102158 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181153126674 0.312017818177 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659104056289 0.0698173142475 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.82512315271 249% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.82389162562 283% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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