Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this memo the writer argues that by stopping evaluation of professors might enable graduates of Omega university to get better jobs. To support this argument the writer points out that evaluation of professors by students make professors to give students higher grade, so the overall grade of Omega University have risen. I find the argument specious in several respects.
To begin with, the argument state that the 30 percent increase of overall average grade of students is due to grade inflation, but there can be other persuasive reason this phenomenon. This argument relies on the assumption that students of fifteen years ago have same intellectual with recent students. Yet students of these days are much smarter than before. They study much when they are young than any other student in the past.
Even if the students intellectual is in same state, evaluation of professors can have positive effect on professors’ teaching. Thus, the professors can serve better class to students, and it can increase the students’ ability to get better grade, so it might accurately reflect student achievement.
Even if the evaluation of professor make grade inflation, there is no evidence grade evaluation had bad impact on getting better jobs to graduate. Most companies want recruit better applicant, and the GPA is one of important factors to evaluate applicants. Thus, it can be positive for graduates to inflate their grade.
Finally, writer compare graduate of Omega University with Alpha University about successfulness at getting jobs, but it is possible Alpha University have better program for getting a better job with respect to Omega University like school-industry cooperation program. Thus, it might be server high quality jobs for Alpha University students.
In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands, to bolster it the writer must provide assurance that the evaluation of professors make grade inflation, and that the inflation of grade had bad effect on graduates to get better jobs.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, so, thus, to begin with, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31775700935 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89823449725 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482866043614 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4708375073 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.8 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262076046901 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936263520692 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698916895769 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141516454952 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510338530577 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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