The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The conclusion of the author that “if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty” is based upon the three primary reasons like more number of agents in the Adams Realty, revenue of Adams Realty is higher and it took less time to sell home. Though the argument of the certainly has merit, because of lack of evidence, weak assumption and vague terminology the author’s argument is unsubstantiated and deeply flawed.
First of all author’s assumption that number of real estate agents helps in quickly selling of homes is questionable. It depends on which types of homes does the Realty sell like the precious one or the cheap ones. As the cheap homes are larger in number thus more number of agents are required and for the prestige ones less number of agents are required as the prestige homes are also less in numbers.
Secondly, the author assumes that Adams Realty sell home quickly could also mean that they are not selling the home in proper price or they are selling the house in negotiable rates which is not profitable for the seller and in result takes less time to sell the home. Also there is large time span of ten years between the selling of homes from the two Realties. In this time span there could be many changes in the city like population, economy of the city and many others which could lead to such a result of taking more time to sell the home.
Finally author considers the revenue is the measure of selling home quickly through Adams Realty but he fails to consider that revenue is not the only measure he should also consider the profit made by both the Realties. The company having more profit is more successful and thus it would help more properly in selling the homes for the people. To exemplify this situation let us consider that one has a revenue of $80 and other has a revenue of $160 but the expenditure of first one is $30 and second one invested around $140, as a result profit of the first company is more and thus it is more successful.
In sum it could be said that author’s conclusion is based upon the faulty and unconvincing terminology, the author could strengthen his position by scrutinize the situation more properly. Thus the argument could be made stronger by anticipating the above mentioned factors. However, without these changes, the argument is implausible and the reasoning is faulty.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: larger
... the cheap ones. As the cheap homes are larger in number thus more number of agents are required...
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Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...esult takes less time to sell the home. Also there is large time span of ten years b...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...f taking more time to sell the home. Finally author considers the revenue is the mea...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 194, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...scrutinize the situation more properly. Thus the argument could be made stronger by ...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'as a result', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.150862068966 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0840517241379 0.0836205057962 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0581896551724 0.0520304965353 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0301724137931 0.0272364105082 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129310344828 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0323275862069 0.0416121511921 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51936749034 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0150862068966 0.026700313972 57% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.112068965517 0.113004496875 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0193965517241 0.0255425247493 76% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00862068965517 0.0127820249294 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2409.0 2731.13054187 88% => OK
No of words: 422.0 446.07635468 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70853080569 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308056872038 0.378187486979 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.21327014218 0.287650121315 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.132701421801 0.208842608468 64% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0829383886256 0.135150697306 61% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51936749034 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 207.018472906 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.417061611374 0.469332199767 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.7397060324 52.1807786196 86% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 30.1428571429 23.2022227129 130% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6030204011 57.7814097925 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.071428571 141.986410481 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1428571429 23.2022227129 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.928571428571 0.724660767414 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 51.4698713609 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.72072072072 1.8405768891 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384101956371 0.441005458295 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.18173957547 0.135418324435 134% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0601500792854 0.0829849096947 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.685081634245 0.58762219726 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.116359318912 0.147661913831 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179754099297 0.193483328276 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675057648717 0.0970749176394 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.430788956175 0.42659136922 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0126970268878 0.0774707102158 16% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264663324742 0.312017818177 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073009966644 0.0698173142475 105% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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