The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
While it may be true that your home may be in better hands with Adams Realty, the author does not provide a cogent case to establish the argument that Adams Realty leads to selling your home faster and at a good price versus Fitch Realty. This argument is rife with holes and assumptions and not strong enough to conclude that Adams Realty is superior to Fitch Realty.
The author states that homes sell faster with Adams Realty assumption is unclear. The author states his own personal experience from ten years ago. Home selling statistics from ten years ago is not a valid assumption to make about home selling techniques and statistics from the two realty’s now. The author also uses his own personal experience to assert the claim that Adams Realty is more superior. It is unclear who else the author asked, or if the author asked any others, or if any research was done to analyze which real estate company is better. The author can’t solely make an assumption from his own experience. Thus it might be a better solution for the author to conduct a survey or call various customers of both real estate companies that have had their homes sold recently and ask them how long it took their home to be sold? And at what price? And compare that to Fitch real estate customers. Thus a valid representative survey or questionnaire is needed to back the author’s argument.
The author also states that Adams Realty had 40 real estate agents, and Fitch real estate had 25 agents that worked part time. There is an obvious gap between the number of employees with both real estate companies. Possible factors could be that Adams realty may be selling homes faster and quicker due to more employees out on the market. It is not clearly stated also whether Adams realty employees work part-time, full-time, or overtime, while the author has stated it for Fitch Realty. The amount of time and employees that contribute to a job can vary how fast homes get sold heavily. We just don’t know accurately the time commitment unless the author clarifies this by again issuing a valid, representative survey or even getting access to employee’s time cards for the year to obtain accurate records of employee number and time commitment. Thus access to employee and company sale records would be need to back the author’s argument.
Building up on the author’s assumption that Adam realty will sell your home quickly and at a good price, the author also suggests that Adam’s home sales last year (168k) was twice as high as that of Fitch’s average home sales last year (144k). This assumption can’t be made because many external factors can contribute to averaging of home sales such as employee time commitment, selling strategies, employee salary, home quality, customer base: as in do the wealthier customers come to Adams Realty versus Fitch serving the middle class? It is unclear as to where the author is obtaining his average home sale statistics from. To better his argument, the author could interview CEO’s of Adams Realty and Fitch Realty, check company records etc. to better see what factors may have contributed to a higher number of average sales to back the author’s argument.
The author states that Adams revenue was twice as high as that of Fitch’s Realty. How much is “twice as high?” The author also states that homes listed with Adams “sell faster,” how fast is considered selling faster, outside of your own personal experience as an author? The author also states Adams Realty will sell your home at a “good price,” what is considered a good price? Thus there are many flaws in the author’s wording and leading facts to back up the author’s argument that could have contributed to a flawed conclusion.
In conclusion, although Adams realty may be better at selling homes, and may have better customer service or selling techniques leading to more customers. The author’s argument is not strong enough to establish that Adams Realty is superior to Fitch Realty and can sell your home quicker and at a better price.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion: Thus,
...re that to Fitch real estate customers. Thus a valid representative survey or questi...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...h real estate had 25 agents that worked part time. There is an obvious gap between the nu...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...omes listed with Adams 'sell faster,' how fast is considered selling faster,...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: , &apos
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...' what is considered a good price? Thus there are many flaws in the author&apos...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.289696969697 0.25644967241 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.149090909091 0.15541462614 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0812121212121 0.0836205057962 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0509090909091 0.0520304965353 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0266666666667 0.0272364105082 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0775757575758 0.125424944231 62% => OK
Participles: 0.0375757575758 0.0416121511921 90% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66519665677 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0351515151515 0.026700313972 132% => OK
Particles: 0.00363636363636 0.001811407834 201% => OK
Determiners: 0.0763636363636 0.113004496875 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0218181818182 0.0255425247493 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0181818181818 0.0127820249294 142% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4142.0 2731.13054187 152% => OK
No of words: 691.0 446.07635468 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.99421128799 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12707312764 4.57801047555 112% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.366136034732 0.378187486979 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.235890014472 0.287650121315 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.153400868307 0.208842608468 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.112879884226 0.135150697306 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66519665677 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 207.018472906 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.382054992764 0.469332199767 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.6213154386 52.1807786196 91% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.039408867 150% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0333333333 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8722669684 57.7814097925 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.066666667 141.986410481 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0333333333 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.333333333333 0.724660767414 46% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.6223347805 51.9672348444 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.78609625668 1.8405768891 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401273070784 0.441005458295 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.142069506699 0.135418324435 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.104417313114 0.0829849096947 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.524189642188 0.58762219726 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152997245871 0.147661913831 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157430925443 0.193483328276 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721563523307 0.0970749176394 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.449985825205 0.42659136922 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0764612887514 0.0774707102158 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282629102574 0.312017818177 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288474204798 0.0698173142475 41% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.33743842365 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.82512315271 207% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 6.46551724138 201% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.82389162562 248% => OK
Total topic words: 27.0 14.657635468 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.