The following appeared in a memo from New Ventures Consulting to the president of HobCo, Inc., a chain of hobby shops.
"Our team has completed its research on suitable building sites for a new HobCo hobby Shop in the city of Grilldon. We discovered that there are currently no hobby shops in southeastern Grilldon. When our researchers conducted a poll of area residents, 88 percent of those who responded indicated that they would welcome the opening of a hobby shop in southeastern Grilldon. Grilldon is in a region of the nation in which the hobby business has increased by 300 percent during the past decade. In addition, Grilldon has a very large population of retirees, a demographic with ample time to devote to hobbies. We therefore recommend that you choose southeastern Grilldon as the site for your next HobCo Hobby Shop. We predict that a shop in this area will draw a steady stream of enthusiastic new HobCo customers."
The argument makes a number of unwarranded assumptions regarding the recommendation to build next HobCo Hobby Shop in the southeastern Grilldon. Taken as a whole, these unstated asssumptions render the argument highly suspect. Indeed, if these unstated assumptions do not hold true, then the argument totallu falls apart.
The argument assumes that 88 percent of responded people would welcome the opening of a hobby shop. However, it is not clear the scope and validity of their survey. The sample, for example, may not have been representative of the city residents, asking residents who do not live in this region. Unless the the survey is fully representative, valid and reliable it can not be used for proving the author’s statement.
Another unstated assumption the argument makes is that the hobby business has increased by 300 percent during the past decade in Grilldon. Nevertheless, it is unclear where the author found this numbers. He did not mention any source. Without proof of it , these numbers can not be reliabe.
Besides it, the author mentioned that Grilldon has a very large population of retirees. However, it is unclear how the author evaluate the population ot retrees. For instance, he could compare this numbers with numbers of retrees from one street. Of course, the population of retrees from Grilldon is large, because this is whole region. Without accure percents or numbers this assumtion is clearly unstated.
The argument makes a number of unstated assumptions that is seriosly undetermine its validity. Unless these assumptions are addressed falls apart, and the president of HobCo should make a mistake choosing southeastern Grilldon as the site for his next HobCo Hobby Shop.
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'for example', 'for instance', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.262820512821 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.137820512821 0.15541462614 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0865384615385 0.0836205057962 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0576923076923 0.0520304965353 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0352564102564 0.0272364105082 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.115384615385 0.125424944231 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0288461538462 0.0416121511921 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85438563536 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00320512820513 0.026700313972 12% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.13141025641 0.113004496875 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0192307692308 0.0255425247493 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0128205128205 0.0127820249294 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1720.0 2731.13054187 63% => OK
No of words: 275.0 446.07635468 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.25454545455 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.57801047555 89% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.410909090909 0.378187486979 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.338181818182 0.287650121315 118% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221818181818 0.208842608468 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123636363636 0.135150697306 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85438563536 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 207.018472906 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.469332199767 119% => OK
Word variations: 57.1727425931 52.1807786196 110% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 15.2777777778 23.2022227129 66% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1079903676 57.7814097925 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5555555556 141.986410481 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2777777778 23.2022227129 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.611111111111 0.724660767414 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 49.095959596 51.9672348444 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.76388888889 1.8405768891 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378370659199 0.441005458295 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105936432088 0.135418324435 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0569610810083 0.0829849096947 69% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.546320989442 0.58762219726 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128779518811 0.147661913831 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14613855278 0.193483328276 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996397370999 0.0970749176394 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.339992128046 0.42659136922 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0769564111005 0.0774707102158 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255658173776 0.312017818177 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045295865009 0.0698173142475 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.33743842365 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.