The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city s flagging economy Dillton s city council voted last year to lower the city s corporate tax rate by 15 percent at the same

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The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.

"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The excerpt from the newspaper tries to give an explanation on why the unemployment remains unchanged even after the Dilton city council put in efforts to get more foreign companies to start their centers in Dilton. The author of the article clearly states a probable explanation for the cause, by stating that the new factories that have opened are filled with out-of-town workers therefore the unemployment rate remains unchanged. Irrespective of how probable authors point be, it is naive to assume it as the only possible explanation.

Firstly, What should be established at the very outset is that the unemployement rate refers to the ratio of people who are not working to the entire population. Although, more than 1000 jobs had been created, no change in unemployment rate, could amount to the fact that Dilton might be a highly populated city, because of which a thousand new jobs would not have created a difference in the unemployment rate. The way the unemployement rate is calculated could also be fallacious, it might not include the people who are running their own business or setups, or people in the rural areas. In addition to that, it might be possible that because of new factories setting up, a lot more people came to Dilton for jobs, thus increasing the overall population. Since the author does not talk about the demographics of the country, the population might have a larger younger population or a larger older population who are currently inelligble to work thus affecting the unemployment rate.

Additionally, it might be also possible that as a result of city's flagging economy the organisations which were already there in Dilton are downsizing, that is reducing the number of employees the company has, and the employees who've left the previous jobs have joined the new factories, thus not affecting the overall rate of unemployment. Some of the residents might also at the same time be leaving their old jobs for recreational pupose or to start their own venture, thus nullifying the jobs that were created by the new factories with respect to the employment rate. It would be clearer if the author provided information about the number of workers who left the job at the same time, or the factories that were closed, so that it was possible to deduce the correct explanation for why the rate didn't change.

Furthermore, the author does not mention anything about the neighboring cities. Due to flagging economy, the residents might have moved out of the city to cities with better employment opportunities and a more promising future leaving their old jobs. Such a change in the current scenario of people leaving jobs to find jobs outside is a probable cause to why the unemployment rate did not change.

A detailed analysis along with more statistical information of the proposed explanation along with the all facts will help see the case from all different angles. However, probable it might be that the favtories are staffed with out of town workers, it remains flawed as it does not provide enough emperical data backing the claim.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... remains unchanged even after the Dilton city council put in efforts to get more ...
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Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...cting the overall rate of unemployment. Some of the residents might also at the same time b...
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Line 9, column 225, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...might be that the favtories are staffed with out of town workers, it remains flawed as i...
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Line 9, column 230, Rule ID: OUT_OF_PLACE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'out-of-town'?
Suggestion: out-of-town
... be that the favtories are staffed with out of town workers, it remains flawed as it does n...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'in addition', 'as a result', 'with respect to']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231040564374 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.162257495591 0.15541462614 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0970017636684 0.0836205057962 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0493827160494 0.0520304965353 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.026455026455 0.0272364105082 97% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118165784832 0.125424944231 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0546737213404 0.0416121511921 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81879690408 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0299823633157 0.026700313972 112% => OK
Particles: 0.00176366843034 0.001811407834 97% => OK
Determiners: 0.132275132275 0.113004496875 117% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0246913580247 0.0255425247493 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.026455026455 0.0127820249294 207% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3102.0 2731.13054187 114% => OK
No of words: 515.0 446.07635468 115% => OK
Chars per words: 6.02330097087 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355339805825 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.27572815534 0.287650121315 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184466019417 0.208842608468 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130097087379 0.135150697306 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81879690408 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 207.018472906 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46213592233 0.469332199767 98% => OK
Word variations: 53.5729276439 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 32.1875 23.2022227129 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2353145328 57.7814097925 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 193.875 141.986410481 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1875 23.2022227129 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.724660767414 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 59.760315534 51.9672348444 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.6962962963 1.8405768891 92% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45525808789 0.441005458295 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.157497283039 0.135418324435 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.071051507069 0.0829849096947 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.679705314335 0.58762219726 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.103350912169 0.147661913831 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.240393610918 0.193483328276 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725037886171 0.0970749176394 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.502865910434 0.42659136922 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.148012508606 0.0774707102158 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.337043196867 0.312017818177 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856866779722 0.0698173142475 123% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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