The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.
"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."
The assumption of the author in this memo about new factories are staffed more non-resident workers than Dillton residents sounds illogically unconvincing fore several reasons. The author ignores important information and some question needed to be answered in order to decide about author’s conclusion.
First question is raises from the scant statistical information the rate of unemployment, which is define as number of unemployment people on all population. The author does not give any information about the number of people, who lives in the city; hence he can not analyze the rate of unemployment. It is entirely possible entire works in two factories are Dillton residents, while the number of them is too low to change the rate of employment. In addition, many students graduated from the university inters in group of unemployment people. Of course, the author must consider this possibility that many people move in the city after establishing the factories, which increase the population. In short, since the argument relies on the limited statistical information, the author’s result is not acceptable.
Also, the author does not mention the number of factories, which are closed in these years. If some of factories, which were in the city, are closed or at least decrease their labors, because of the economic condition. As a result, the number of unemployment people will be increased while new factories are establishes in the city and they hire about 1000 workers. Therefore, if the author does not more information about the number of factories in the city, which closed or opened, the argument is flawed.
Another question is that whether decreasing the city's corporate tax can encourage companies. In fact, it is entirely possible the amount of original tax was so high that decreasing it by 15 percent is not attractive for companies. In addition, the author does not provide any guarantee that establishing new factories in this city can decrease the rate of unemployment and improve economic growth. It is possible factories hire non-residential workers, and surely; residents’ economic condition will remain unchanged.
In the fourth place, base on the fact that two factories have opened in the city, the author infers that efforts of Dillton's city council is successful. However, it is not necessarily the case. Indeed, the author overlook that other factors can be more effective. Having the great number of unemployment people lead factories to have access cheap workforces. Without considering this possible scenario, the author can not justifiably conclude that council’s decisions are successful.
In sum up, the argument is flawed rationally and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the author must provide more statistical information about the number of workers in the factories, and those are added to group of unemployment people recently. To evaluate better the author’s assumption, we must know about all effective factors on the economic growth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'defined'.
Suggestion: defined
...tion the rate of unemployment, which is define as number of unemployment people on all...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the factories') or simply say ''some factories''.
Suggestion: some of the factories; some factories
...es, which are closed in these years. If some of factories, which were in the city, are closed or ...
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Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...osed or opened, the argument is flawed. Another question is that whether decreas...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'while', 'at least', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'in short', 'of course', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260473588342 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.140255009107 0.15541462614 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0892531876138 0.0836205057962 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0510018214936 0.0520304965353 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0200364298725 0.0272364105082 74% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136612021858 0.125424944231 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0291438979964 0.0416121511921 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.06180111026 2.79052419416 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0127504553734 0.026700313972 48% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.112932604736 0.113004496875 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0182149362477 0.0255425247493 71% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127504553734 0.0127820249294 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3054.0 2731.13054187 112% => OK
No of words: 475.0 446.07635468 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.42947368421 6.12365571057 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.418947368421 0.378187486979 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.315789473684 0.287650121315 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.244210526316 0.208842608468 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.178947368421 0.135150697306 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06180111026 2.79052419416 110% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 207.018472906 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454736842105 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 51.2238017051 52.1807786196 98% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7916666667 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4250141209 57.7814097925 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.25 141.986410481 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7916666667 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 51.3706140351 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 2.01724137931 1.8405768891 110% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413584781345 0.441005458295 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.115306825779 0.135418324435 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0784756881024 0.0829849096947 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.608260518697 0.58762219726 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126702009395 0.147661913831 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177300081447 0.193483328276 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649525180665 0.0970749176394 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.452451366676 0.42659136922 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.112376351466 0.0774707102158 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291303196521 0.312017818177 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386594870511 0.0698173142475 55% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.87684729064 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 11.0 5.36822660099 205% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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