The following appeared as a part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal.
"A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."
It appeared in a letter to the editor of scientific journal that: in a study of eighteen rhesus monkeys it provided a clue the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations the firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of hormone called Cortisol. Cortisol is the hormone which primes the body for increased activity levels as do their younger siblings. It is also studied that the firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations. The study also found that during the time of pregnancy first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than the other one's who had several offspring. This argument ultimately fails as it lacks the proper evidence and is unconvincing and has several major flaws.
The author asserts that the study was done on eighteen rhesus monkeys which provided the information about different levels of stimulation of individual's. But, in my opinion this is unconvincing as author should have mentioned who conducted the study and on what basis was the levels of stimulation of individual rhesus monkey decided. It is also asserted by the author that the firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of hormone cortisol which influences there body for more activity. But, the author provides no proper evidence that how did they measure the level of the hormone cortisol in firstborn infants. In addition, it is also to be answered that with whom did the author compare the level of firstborn infant, either the cortisol level decreases with the time period they live.
It is also not being shown that what are the average levels which cortisol should have in the firstborn infants. Further, the author has asserted that the firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations. But doesn't provide the evidence on what basis does he claims so and how this study of level of cortisol in rhesus monkey being compared to the firstborn humans. It is also studied that during the time of pregnancy the first-time mother monkeys have higher levels of cortisol than the other who had several offspring. But, this claim also has several fallacies such as on what basis or parameters was that being decided. So, these are the questions which need to be answered.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...cortisol in stimulating situations. But doesnt provide the evidence on what basis does...
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Message: Did you mean 'claim'?
Suggestion: claim
...vide the evidence on what basis does he claims so and how this study of level of corti...
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Message: Did you mean 'claim'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: claim
...vide the evidence on what basis does he claims so and how this study of level of corti...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'in addition', 'such as', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256038647343 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.166666666667 0.15541462614 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0966183574879 0.0836205057962 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0458937198068 0.0520304965353 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0314009661836 0.0272364105082 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.144927536232 0.125424944231 116% => OK
Participles: 0.036231884058 0.0416121511921 87% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60452038017 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0144927536232 0.026700313972 54% => OK
Particles: 0.0048309178744 0.001811407834 267% => OK
Determiners: 0.108695652174 0.113004496875 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0048309178744 0.0255425247493 19% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0386473429952 0.0127820249294 302% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2351.0 2731.13054187 86% => OK
No of words: 389.0 446.07635468 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.04370179949 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.393316195373 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.27763496144 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19794344473 0.208842608468 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120822622108 0.135150697306 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60452038017 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 207.018472906 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.398457583548 0.469332199767 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.5608497709 52.1807786196 80% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 22.8823529412 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3333794694 57.7814097925 58% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.294117647 141.986410481 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.470588235294 0.724660767414 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.14285714286 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 50.6458490851 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.79207920792 1.8405768891 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.56838556665 0.441005458295 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.146136177942 0.135418324435 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0892765111757 0.0829849096947 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.570363711195 0.58762219726 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.124842343169 0.147661913831 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.276282887434 0.193483328276 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146401940277 0.0970749176394 151% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.681307986106 0.42659136922 160% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00452684377042 0.0774707102158 6% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.491002622438 0.312017818177 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804646691028 0.0698173142475 115% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.82512315271 228% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.82389162562 283% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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