The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
The arguer have cited that the autonomy of any country depends on its borders and if the immigrants are entering a country they are posing a threat to its economy and national identity. So, the arguer further asserts that every effort should be made to return the immigrants to their country of origin. However, there are some points that question the soundness of the recommendation made by the arguer and the argument provides no clear evidence and is unconvincing.
Firstly, the freedom of the country and the independence to people only depends up to certain percent on the strength of its borders. However, the arguer also asserts if the immigrants entering a country are not checked, they may possess threat to economy and national identity. But, the argument doesn't provide evidence to prove that how the immigrants can threaten the economy and national identity. The argument could have been bolstered by providing evidence that could have proved why he have asserted so. The arguer also needs to provide the data about which countries immigrants pose much harm to the country. But, the question arises is that are all the immigrants posing threat to the country? From where are these immigrants being able to enter in the country? Is there no step being taken by the government ? Perhaps, the immigrants might possess threat to national identity and economy but the arguer provides no information about the areas which they are targeting. What could be the reason behind this? The arguer could have provided the reason and the approximate data about number of immigrants which are entering the country to convince the reader. And, also he asserts that if the immigrants are being caught they must return to their country of origin but provides no reason behind his statement. Since, it could happen that the immigrant have been caught with arms and grenades on the border and is it still required that the immigrant should be return to his country of origin without being asked questions or put into jail as a punishment.
Nevertheless, there are several points which arguer needs to provide to make it compelling for the reader and should provide evidences which might have possessed threat to the country earlier due to immigrants to bolster his assertion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...nd national identity. But, the argument doesnt provide evidence to prove that how the ...
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Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
... evidence that could have proved why he have asserted so. The arguer also needs to p...
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Line 3, column 1468, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'returned'?
Suggestion: returned
...l required that the immigrant should be return to his country of origin without being ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'still']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231527093596 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.20197044335 0.15541462614 130% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0295566502463 0.0836205057962 35% => Some adjectives wanted.
Adverbs: 0.0369458128079 0.0520304965353 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0418719211823 0.0272364105082 154% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0886699507389 0.125424944231 71% => OK
Participles: 0.0689655172414 0.0416121511921 166% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53723258053 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0492610837438 0.026700313972 184% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00246305418719 0.001811407834 136% => OK
Determiners: 0.135467980296 0.113004496875 120% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0320197044335 0.0255425247493 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0295566502463 0.0127820249294 231% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2274.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 379.0 446.07635468 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390501319261 0.378187486979 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.279683377309 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.187335092348 0.208842608468 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0923482849604 0.135150697306 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53723258053 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 207.018472906 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419525065963 0.469332199767 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.4872757021 52.1807786196 83% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2941176471 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8137039639 57.7814097925 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.764705882 141.986410481 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.724660767414 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.14285714286 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 50.2624553779 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.38596491228 1.8405768891 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.519013369893 0.441005458295 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.150437108753 0.135418324435 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.06185329775 0.0829849096947 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.611779434411 0.58762219726 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.174039597998 0.147661913831 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.269169572421 0.193483328276 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124876551511 0.0970749176394 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.621236404426 0.42659136922 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.158157287443 0.0774707102158 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.392612476136 0.312017818177 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.194581817068 0.0698173142475 279% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.33743842365 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.87684729064 204% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 1.0 6.46551724138 15% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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