The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council."An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East

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The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.

"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds represent the most frequently given reason for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid—a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil—as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

There is hardly any real evidence that could ever support the claim of the report publicized in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council. The claim is actually so implausible and unconvincing it is almost funny. There are so many holes in the logic and the presentation of this claim it is really hard to note them all in a short essay so we will try to point the reader to few of the most noticeable ones.

First and foremost, the one thing I do remember most of my MIT introduction to programming online class was one of the lecturers emphasize on the “Correlation does not imply causation”, and here is a classic appearance of this phenomena. It might be true that there is more fish consumption in East Meria. And, it might be true that the schoolers in East Meria catch fewer colds and that they skip fewer days, but there could be so many other reasons for West Merians to skip school, other than fish consumption. To name a few, the school in East Meria might be better so the kids feel happy to attend it. Or the East Meria socio-economic metric is more funding of education. Those other reason making the picking of the fish consumption seem to be forced and unnatural. Thus, the correlation itself is not enough to base action upon it.

Another dubious part is that the council recommends a specific supplement derived from fish oil rather than to eat real fish. Taking a supplement and eating raw food is hardly the same thing. Moreover, if the people of East Meria can afford to eat raw fish it is highly likely that the people of West Meria can afford to buy fish at more or less the same price. Therefore, the choice of the supplement is questionable and is undermining the previous assumption that fish consumption will improve the colds. It is more corrigible to suggest a consumption of real fish rather than any derivative of the fishery. Especially under the given information of proximity and data of East and West Meria.

The proper way to rais the school attendance should be by carrying a detailed comparison between East and West Meria. What are the schools like? Is there any factory that carries out a risk of pollution to the West Merians? There are many questions to be answered in such a survey. After there is an ample amount of data, only then could the community come with a good solution path to make fewer absenteeisms. The fact the absents reported on schools and workplace alike hints on a deeper reason than sole consumption of fish which should be researched and analyzed more in order to come with a valid solution.

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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'more or less']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239436619718 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.142857142857 0.15541462614 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108651911469 0.0836205057962 130% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0603621730382 0.0520304965353 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0281690140845 0.0272364105082 103% => OK
Prepositions: 0.108651911469 0.125424944231 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0301810865191 0.0416121511921 73% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67766184121 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0362173038229 0.026700313972 136% => OK
Particles: 0.00201207243461 0.001811407834 111% => OK
Determiners: 0.116700201207 0.113004496875 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0241448692153 0.0255425247493 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00804828973843 0.0127820249294 63% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2588.0 2731.13054187 95% => OK
No of words: 459.0 446.07635468 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63834422658 6.12365571057 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.276688453159 0.378187486979 73% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.18082788671 0.287650121315 63% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137254901961 0.208842608468 66% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106753812636 0.135150697306 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67766184121 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 207.018472906 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505446623094 0.469332199767 108% => OK
Word variations: 58.0663904984 52.1807786196 111% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.8636363636 23.2022227129 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6001087813 57.7814097925 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.636363636 141.986410481 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 23.2022227129 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 38.9464250347 51.9672348444 75% => OK
Elegance: 1.6347826087 1.8405768891 89% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435373456876 0.441005458295 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119804029729 0.135418324435 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0915317873382 0.0829849096947 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.526675195306 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130817161694 0.147661913831 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182048548348 0.193483328276 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727166041284 0.0970749176394 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.493041296715 0.42659136922 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0428366206604 0.0774707102158 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338533148409 0.312017818177 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326351849197 0.0698173142475 47% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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