Hospital statistics regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller-skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment. Within that group of people, 75 percent of those who had accidents in streets or parking lots had not been wearing any protective clothing (helmets, knee pads, etc.) or any light-reflecting material (clip-on lights, glow-in-the-dark wrist pads, etc.). Clearly, the statistics indicate that by investing in high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their risk of being severely injured in an accident
The author claims that by investing in the high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their risk of being severly injured in an accident. At first this statement seems plausible but after the meticulous analysis it becomes evident that it contains many flaws and in order to prove this statement true he have to cite the following evidences to make the argument more sound such as :
Firstly, the stastical record of hospitals regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller-skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment, at first it seems plausible but after the careful analysis it shows otherwise. As there are records of emergency going cases only but there are no records of cases which come due to the other type of injuries such as accidents or other injuries which takes place due to the negligence of the roller-skaters. Also there are other possibilities such as the stastiscal data, it is not mentioned on how many people it is taken. What if the population considered is too small? So, exact figures are required.
Secondly, 75% people were not wearing any protective equipment in the parking lots or in streets , but what if the raods were in poor condition there? what if the environment conditions were bad at that time? for instance it is hard to roll in rainy conditions as a result there will be accidents even with the proper protective equipment. So conditions of roads, weather conditions also play a greater part in the accidents. Also the population from which this 75% is taken is not mentioned, if the whole population is taken or not. What if it taken from small group of people and the whole population is not taken?
Last but not least author only culpates the faulty equipment for the accidents but ddidn't mentioned about the technical skills each person have, there is obvious possibility that less skilled the person is, more will be chances of accidents. Also there is no mentioning of the age groups. Younger and Older group people are more prone to the accidents than the adults. As a result there will be more injuries to kids or the older people.
So at the end i would like to say that the argument consists of myriad of fallacious statements and in order to validate this argument author has to answer a number of questions stated above. A reliable source is required from which the data shoul be collected.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...n order to prove this statement true he have to cite the following evidences to make...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...o the negligence of the roller-skaters. Also there are other possibilities such as t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...protective equipment in the parking lots or in streets , but what if the raods we...
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Suggestion: ,
...pment in the parking lots or in streets , but what if the raods were in poor cond...
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Suggestion: What
...the raods were in poor condition there? what if the environment conditions were bad ...
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...nment conditions were bad at that time? for instance it is hard to roll in rainy co...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...o play a greater part in the accidents. Also the population from which this 75% is t...
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Suggestion: not the least
...hole population is not taken? Last but not least author only culpates the faulty equipme...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... is, more will be chances of accidents. Also there is no mentioning of the age group...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ds or the older people. So at the end i would like to say that the argument con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85990338164 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6863773973 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.471057884232 637% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 106.684489252 57.8364921388 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.777777778 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242233607872 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563100509591 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686757488221 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110672004977 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875920672746 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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