An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author has not mentioned any statistical records about the level of severity of this issue. There can be paucity of people actually suffering from Vitamin A deficiency. There is no statistics about the economical condition of population suffering. There is a good chance that the ones suffering from it will not be able to afford the new expensive millet also. Then the whole argument will prove out to be useless. Author need to provide more data about the people suffering from this deficiency with more specific and meaningful categorization.
One more aspect which can be considered about this deficiency issue is whether this problem is in only one part of nation or the whole of it. If this issue is concentrated at a particular location inside the country then preventive measure should be considered for that part only instead of complete nation paying for new millet. It will be like wasting the resources of a already indigent nation without any requirement in most of the parts.
Author has not mentioned anything about this international development organization. Is that organization authentic ? Whether this new millet is their new product or is it already tested somewhere else ? There is no relevant data provided about the company. One cannot trust a company for a national cause without any details about the company. There is a possibility that this company is a fraud and it is just making use of the poverty of this nation to make more profit. Also there is not data available about the effectiveness of millet. If this millet proves out to be ineffective then it will be a wastage of big amount of resources for nothing.
Author has commented about millet already being a staple food of Tagus, but that does not mean that people will accept it readily. There are many regional foods in every place which are not accepted or liked by mass of the population. Deciding the adoption of new millt based on this reason does not look like a good idea.
Government of Tagus have to test out this new millet in some affected regions and then only think about implementing this approach nation-wide. The claim of author is alluring but not very strong reasoned to accept.
First try to figure out the pattern for GRE argument essays:
para 1: introduction //don't argue something here
para 2: argument 1
para 3: argument 2
para 4: argument 3
para 5: conclusion
We need to find out three arguments
Second, try to analyze the structure of the text:
condition 1:
While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet.
condition 2:
Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety.
conclusion:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Third, argue according to the condition 1, 2, and conclusion.
argument 1:
if the new breed of millet gives a smaller yield than the old one and the subsidy given to the farmers is not high enough, the farmers may not adopt the new breed of millet. more...
argument 2:
It might be that, even though the new miller breed is high on vitamin A, it is much less favorable in terms of taste and appearance compared to the millet type in current in use. If this is the case, the public may not be willing to adopt the new breed of grain. more...
argument 3:
we need to be provided with information on the cost-benefit analysis for the government to actively promote the new breed of Millet. For instance, if only 5% of the population is affected by the vitamin A deficiency, the cost of the proposed promotion mechanism may be too costly and there may be better alternatives that can solve the problem more effectively and with fewer cost to the government. more...
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