"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they dev

Essay topics:

"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."

The author's claim that publishing international news on the front covers of the magaizne has resulted in significant decrease in the number of copies they sold. According to the author in past three years the poorest selling magazine were those magazines which featured international news stories on their front cover. Also he mentions that other competing news magazines have decreased the number of cover stories they devote to international news, so they should also decrease there emphasis on international news. This kind of conclusion is based on many assumptions which is not taken care and hence is quite absurd.

Firstly, the author assumes that reader is only intrested in reading the first page of the magazines and will not buy it if the cover page consists of foreign news stories which is untrue beacause not only the presence of that foreign story is responsible but the way the magazine is presented, the color, the size, font and other minute details matter because the reader will just take a glance at the magazine and decide to buy it or not and if the magazine looks attractive then it is high passuiblity that the magazine might get sold.Hence we cannot say that reader will reject the magazine if he finds a international news on the front even though the magazine looks very attractive.

Also, its a vague generlization that they should their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers which might get contradicted when any international affair is so big that a large number of mass is intrested to read it. For example during the US president election every Indian newspaper displayed Trump's news and each one was intrested to read it. In such cases the magazines sell will be poor and the result will be the same.

Another assumption that the author made was that only international news is responisble for selling magazines, if we have a news paper with a national news and a grammatical error and a magazine with international yet well written news then it seems quite an obivious choice that the magazine with international news will be sold more than the one with national news and also it is assumed that the reader only takes the magazine for reading of its first page but it is also untrue and the context inside and on other pages also matter and not just the cover page.

Therefore it can be very well concluded that not just the front cover is important and decresing on international news and refraining to display will increase the sell of the magazine.

Votes
Average: 5 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...onal news stories on their front cover. Also he mentions that other competing news m...
^^^^
Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...azine and decide to buy it or not and if the magazine looks attractive then it is...
^^
Line 3, column 540, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
...iblity that the magazine might get sold.Hence we cannot say that reader will reject t...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 540, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...iblity that the magazine might get sold.Hence we cannot say that reader will reject t...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...er will reject the magazine if he finds a international news on the front even th...
^
Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'international news'.
Suggestion: international news
...er will reject the magazine if he finds a international news on the front even though the magazine l...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...agazine looks very attractive. Also, its a vague generlization that they should ...
^^^
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...any international affair is so big that a large number of mass is intrested to read it. For examp...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: NEWS_PAPER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newspaper'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: newspaper
...ble for selling magazines, if we have a news paper with a national news and a grammatical ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... matter and not just the cover page. Therefore it can be very well concluded that not ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, so, then, therefore, well, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88045977011 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67872422668 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441379310345 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.8473053892 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 195.378632404 57.8364921388 338% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 212.3 119.503703932 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.5 23.324526521 186% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415459190866 0.218282227539 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198051067236 0.0743258471296 266% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150459879646 0.0701772020484 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246157835571 0.128457276422 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138211419235 0.0628817314937 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.3 14.3799401198 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.29 48.3550499002 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.197005988 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.1389221557 172% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.