“Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.”
While it may be true that the shoppers for the central plaza have been decreased dramatically, the author here doesn’t show a clear relation between increase and decrease of the shoppers.as skateboarding is a sport and it can’t be compared with the decrease in the shoppers at the central plaza. This argument doesn’t have a proper stand.
Looking at the decrease in the shoppers, we can say there might be a chance of stores near by the city plaza having much more attractive goods then the central plaza has. There might have been a considerable increase in the completion between the malls by new malls coming up which wasn’t stated about. Does it have all new stock or is there any damage or old stock which is making the sales go down. Are the owners coming up with trendy stock which helps the shoppers get attract easily. Due to these reasons there is a chance of shoppers preferring so other place to shop then this.
While it comes to the litter and vandalism is it sure that the litter and vandalism are only due to the skateboards? The people coming for the skateboard might also be a cause for the litter in the central plaza, there is equal chance of this happening if the same people come for the shopping in the central plaza. Skateboard as mentioned above comes under a sport which can’t be compared with the stores present in the mall. The skateboard is anyways making the customers to come to the central plaza but the store owners are unable to manage and get them shop, which clearly shows the inability of the management of the stores.
Building upon is it sure that the rest of the things which are to be done are been done in the same way as earlier. For example, we do not know whether the advertising of the stores to the people in the city is done in the same way as earlier which might affect the sales dramatically keeping all this in mind we can say the author has made an argument without proper information and assumption considered.
Adding, to this the central plaza after prohibiting the skateboards is not sure to get back the previous state and moreover it might also loose the few shoppers coming up due to the skateboards. However, the author’s argument doesn’t seem to be appealing and persuasive to get the skateboards prohibited in the city at central plaza.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...n say there might be a chance of stores near by the city plaza having much more attract...
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Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...plaza having much more attractive goods then the central plaza has. There might have...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'anyway', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'for example', 'in the same way']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220779220779 0.25644967241 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.17316017316 0.15541462614 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0800865800866 0.0836205057962 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0454545454545 0.0520304965353 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0238095238095 0.0272364105082 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.108225108225 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0584415584416 0.0416121511921 140% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6175032319 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030303030303 0.026700313972 113% => OK
Particles: 0.004329004329 0.001811407834 239% => OK
Determiners: 0.151515151515 0.113004496875 134% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.021645021645 0.0255425247493 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0151515151515 0.0127820249294 119% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2342.0 2731.13054187 86% => OK
No of words: 412.0 446.07635468 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68446601942 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.29854368932 0.378187486979 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.206310679612 0.287650121315 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.150485436893 0.208842608468 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0946601941748 0.135150697306 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6175032319 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 207.018472906 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427184466019 0.469332199767 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.5674477914 52.1807786196 87% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 27.4666666667 23.2022227129 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6943342064 57.7814097925 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.133333333 141.986410481 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4666666667 23.2022227129 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.866666666667 0.724660767414 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 48.0977346278 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.59821428571 1.8405768891 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.603331113954 0.441005458295 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.179692037331 0.135418324435 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0938152136978 0.0829849096947 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.65682962242 0.58762219726 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.204456577888 0.147661913831 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.2937824753 0.193483328276 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146234602832 0.0970749176394 151% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.522491085197 0.42659136922 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0750845127781 0.0774707102158 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.457021942717 0.312017818177 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469749713488 0.0698173142475 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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