A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The recent studies includes the experimentation done on a single species of a monkey, and its correlation to human which is not firm, hence produces a flaw to accept. The hormones responsible for respective activities might be a sub-part or not considerably the main constituent contributing to the higher levels of response in all the species. The stimulating conditions, though might appear congruent, but the surroundings, the demeanor of species differ considerably.
The study on monkeys necessarily cannot be accurate to lay inferences on humans. For example, the gestation periods in humans and various species of monkeys vary, so does the amount of hormones secretion with the pregnancy stage. The first born infant are the primogenitures of their generation’s family. They have a natural tendency to possess fear for their siblings. A firstborn infant’s mortality should not affect this natural tendency of the next born, as this gets assimilated with time after their birth. The levels of cortisol are naturally build rather than pre-birth production.
A pre-birth mortality would also arouse anxiety of a mother bearing the second child after the first pregnancy’s failure. This creates a profound doubtable questions against the theory made by this study which claims the higher levels of cortisol’s production only in first-time pregnancy mother.
The underlying genetics which deals with traits drawn from ancestors, can limit this study’s inference to the rhesus monkey itself. The release of similar hormones to exhibit such traits, can be qualified only to monkeys. Moreover, the surroundings and conditions they live can contribute the production levels. As far the monkeys or any other animal in a real world, give away response more realistically, than one who are carefully fed and studied in labs with pleasant environment. The experimented monkeys get adapted to the labs conditions and safety, that they are no more anxious enough.
Any individual exposed to a harsh and disastrous environment, espouses to act and defends to jump out of the black-hole safely. The plumb of a particular hormones release depends on the extent of stimulating conditions. The harsher and sudden, the greater the production. In rare cases, the calmness and patience among individual under such a calamity is required, thus the production of cortisol diminishes. Such inferences could be made if the study lacks acuteness and flexible correlations. Thus, it draws out vague conclusions and arises dubious questions which are unanswered by a qualifying study.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255965292842 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.12147505423 0.15541462614 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101952277657 0.0836205057962 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0542299349241 0.0520304965353 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0195227765727 0.0272364105082 72% => OK
Prepositions: 0.104121475054 0.125424944231 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0325379609544 0.0416121511921 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.14538038318 2.79052419416 113% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0260303687636 0.026700313972 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00433839479393 0.001811407834 240% => OK
Determiners: 0.127982646421 0.113004496875 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0195227765727 0.0255425247493 76% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0108459869848 0.0127820249294 85% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2593.0 2731.13054187 95% => OK
No of words: 399.0 446.07635468 89% => OK
Chars per words: 6.49874686717 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.4335839599 0.378187486979 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.350877192982 0.287650121315 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.245614035088 0.208842608468 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.177944862155 0.135150697306 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14538038318 2.79052419416 113% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 207.018472906 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586466165414 0.469332199767 125% => OK
Word variations: 70.1650615094 52.1807786196 134% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 18.1363636364 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3615349995 57.7814097925 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.863636364 141.986410481 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.454545454545 0.724660767414 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 53.2240829346 51.9672348444 102% => OK
Elegance: 2.01111111111 1.8405768891 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393206984948 0.441005458295 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122723981702 0.135418324435 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0568395638816 0.0829849096947 68% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.540756574627 0.58762219726 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133759029808 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152183173061 0.193483328276 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532943958374 0.0970749176394 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.37720275533 0.42659136922 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0770814039736 0.0774707102158 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263090680972 0.312017818177 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481546194261 0.0698173142475 69% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 14.657635468 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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