A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per d

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A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called Isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.

According to author conclusion that North America suffer more of fatigue and depression than compare to people in Asia. The main reason behind it is Asians eat soy which is contains phytochemicals called isoflavones which helps to reduce the fatigue and depression hence, North America people should eat soy.

First flaw in the above argument is the chronic fatigue and chronic depression are two different disease. The fatigue is caused due to physical activity where as, depression is psychological problem. hence, we cannot draw conclusion that by eating soy the disease will be cured.

The soy contains rich nutrition its good that we should eat soy daily for good health. Author said that it contains phytochemicals called isoflavones which cure few disease but, he has not mention how it will cure the fatigue and depression by consuming daily which is vague assumption. If he had explained how this isoflavones is related to the above disease then the argument will be strengthen and valid.

Even the climate condition is different in both the countries. Where in North America it will be more cold compare to Asia, it may be the reason for fatigue or depression hence, author should have explained about climate condition whether it effect the disease or not.

In conclusion, the above argument has many flaws hence it weaken the argument with lack of assumption. If the author had given few statements related to isoflavones which helps to cure fatigue and depression then it would be flawless.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...igue is caused due to physical activity where as, depression is psychological problem. h...
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Suggestion: Hence
...s, depression is psychological problem. hence, we cannot draw conclusion that by eati...
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Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun disease seems to be countable; consider using: 'few diseases'.
Suggestion: few diseases
...chemicals called isoflavones which cure few disease but, he has not mention how it will cur...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mentioned'.
Suggestion: mentioned
... which cure few disease but, he has not mention how it will cure the fatigue and depres...
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Line 9, column 59, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'weakens'?
Suggestion: weakens
... above argument has many flaws hence it weaken the argument with lack of assumption. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, so, then, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 55.5748502994 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1270.0 2260.96107784 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 248.0 441.139720559 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12096774194 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6936449664 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 204.123752495 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463709677419 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1717807035 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.833333333 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195054793624 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811943243546 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088768752171 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121820950727 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958010613431 0.0628817314937 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 98.500998004 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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