Techno corporation is our top pick for the investment this term. We urge all our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed a stellite technology has been approvd by the FTA to compete with current

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Techno corporation is our top pick for the investment this term. We urge all our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed a stellite technology has been approvd by the FTA to compete with current satellite provider. The company is techno corporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not monopoly.Thus , the new venture of technocorporation into satellite televsion will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now

The argument conclude that If people have invest our money in the techcorporation it will be very profitable as compare to before it can be invest.In this arguement Newsletter are offering to the different prople have investing our money ti the satellite television so it will be invent in the new compant Techcorporation because In first time in ten year this compat develope a new satellite technolohgy is approve by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider.In this argument Author have many assempition and holes prove without any evidence.

To begin with,Author says the last Consumer survey 80% of respondent the current satellite provider but it cannot be mention in which condition they will be dissatisfied what is the reason behind them.Thus new Compay is very profitable as compare to the current satellite provider.It will not mention the after people have investing our money to this compay so in some time it's profi\t is go to the people will have investment in the compay.

Compay have profit afer it will sell the new satellite techonlogy it will not mention in this arguement.Only they shoe it's approve by the current satellite provider FTA,it will not mention current satelite is not work properly and it's condition is very bade as comper to the new salellite.It will only assume that the company is first satellite technology lauch and it will directry approve by the old satellite provide.So it definatly gain profit after it will sell the satellite in the market.

It not mention in this argue after lanching the satellite in the market people and some compay are buy the new satellite and tey are satisfy or not.If they are satisfy so how many people are like the new satellite and the new technology.But Some people are not sure about the technology so they did not but the new twchnology and they have prefer the old technology satellite.If this type of people have this nature so this new techonology are not usefull and indirectly profit of the this new compay are less than the current satellite compay provide.

If people have accepet this technology so after some years they will be usefull and nice condition or not to the current satellite.For example current satellite have wokind in very good condition at least dozen years but the new satellite not work as compare to the current satellite so it will be not usefull.This technology is very costly to the market so if peopler have not prefer this type of technology.So compay have loss and not profit are gain very much.

Finaly,I conclude that author only assempition if the new satellite is approve by the current satellite provide so it will neccessary in profit gain in the future it will not sure in future profit gain to the people or not it only basis of the approval it mention.So people have more carefull to the investing our money is safe and profit is avilable in the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'concludes'.
Suggestion: concludes
The argument conclude that If people have invest our money in...
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Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'invested'.
Suggestion: invested
...e argument conclude that If people have invest our money in the techcorporation it wil...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...e as compare to before it can be invest.In this arguement Newsletter are offering ...
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Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'approved'.
Suggestion: approved
...develope a new satellite technolohgy is approve by the FTA to compete with the current ...
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Suggestion: In
...ete with the current satellite provider.In this argument Author have many assempit...
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Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , Author
...e without any evidence. To begin with,Author says the last Consumer survey 80% of re...
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Suggestion: Thus
...atisfied what is the reason behind them.Thus new Compay is very profitable as compar...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...atisfied what is the reason behind them.Thus new Compay is very profitable as compar...
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Suggestion: It
...mpare to the current satellite provider.It will not mention the after people have ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'gone'.
Suggestion: gone
...s compay so in some time its profi\t is go to the people will have investment in t...
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Suggestion: Only
...y it will not mention in this arguement.Only they shoe its approve by the current sa...
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...ve by the current satellite provider FTA,it will not mention current satelite is no...
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...ery bade as comper to the new salellite.It will only assume that the company is fi...
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Suggestion: So
...ry approve by the old satellite provide.So it definatly gain profit after it will ...
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Message: Did you mean 'mentions'?
Suggestion: mentions
... the satellite in the market. It not mention in this argue after lanching the satell...
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Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'satisfied'.
Suggestion: satisfied
...y are buy the new satellite and tey are satisfy or not.If they are satisfy so how many ...
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Suggestion: If
...ew satellite and tey are satisfy or not.If they are satisfy so how many people are...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'satisfied'.
Suggestion: satisfied
... and tey are satisfy or not.If they are satisfy so how many people are like the new sat...
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Suggestion: But
...he new satellite and the new technology.But Some people are not sure about the tech...
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Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'preferred'.
Suggestion: preferred
...ot but the new twchnology and they have prefer the old technology satellite.If this ty...
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Suggestion: If
...ave prefer the old technology satellite.If this type of people have this nature so...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...re not usefull and indirectly profit of the this new compay are less than the current sa...
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Suggestion: For
...ndition or not to the current satellite.For example current satellite have wokind i...
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Line 9, column 206, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a dozen'.
Suggestion: a dozen
... wokind in very good condition at least dozen years but the new satellite not work as...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...ent satellite so it will be not usefull.This technology is very costly to the market...
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Line 9, column 379, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'preferred'.
Suggestion: preferred
...ly to the market so if peopler have not prefer this type of technology.So compay have ...
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Suggestion: So
...have not prefer this type of technology.So compay have loss and not profit are gai...
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Suggestion: , I
...not profit are gain very much. Finaly,I conclude that author only assempition i...
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Line 11, column 72, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'approved'.
Suggestion: approved
...nly assempition if the new satellite is approve by the current satellite provide so it ...
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Line 11, column 257, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mentions'?
Suggestion: mentions
...or not it only basis of the approval it mention.So people have more carefull to the inv...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...t only basis of the approval it mention.So people have more carefull to the invest...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'thus', 'at least', 'for example', 'to begin with']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255905511811 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.159448818898 0.15541462614 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.114173228346 0.0836205057962 137% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0669291338583 0.0520304965353 129% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0590551181102 0.0272364105082 217% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.108267716535 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0295275590551 0.0416121511921 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.70939828311 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0255905511811 0.026700313972 96% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.11811023622 0.113004496875 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0334645669291 0.0255425247493 131% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00590551181102 0.0127820249294 46% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2897.0 2731.13054187 106% => OK
No of words: 494.0 446.07635468 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86437246964 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.346153846154 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248987854251 0.287650121315 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.17004048583 0.208842608468 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133603238866 0.135150697306 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70939828311 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 207.018472906 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.348178137652 0.469332199767 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 39.4845138045 52.1807786196 76% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 20.039408867 30% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 82.3333333333 23.2022227129 355% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1504668696 57.7814097925 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 482.833333333 141.986410481 340% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 82.3333333333 23.2022227129 355% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 0.724660767414 184% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 3.58251231527 865% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 107.232118758 51.9672348444 206% => OK
Elegance: 1.37931034483 1.8405768891 75% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357385961546 0.441005458295 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.452641311204 0.135418324435 334% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0673566307187 0.0829849096947 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.58762219726 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 3.04047097224e-16 0.147661913831 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.264297925796 0.193483328276 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615838967739 0.0970749176394 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.511547611915 0.42659136922 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0762081384209 0.0774707102158 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264297925796 0.312017818177 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615838967739 0.0698173142475 88% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 14.657635468 41% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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