Techno corporation is our top pick for the investment this term. We urge all our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed a stellite technology has been approvd by the FTA to compete with current satellite provider. The company is techno corporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not monopoly.Thus , the new venture of technocorporation into satellite televsion will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.
The statement said that "Techcorporation is top pick for investment toady. They urge to invest in new company. For first time they have developed a satellite and it has been approved by FTA to compete with the current satellite distributor. A consumer survey said that over 80% people do not like current television last year. So it is beneficial for investors to invest money in this new corporation." I have found falws in this statement.
Firstly, this is a new company and they have made a satellite for first time in last ten years. So it might be risky to invest in that company. There is no sign of success of that company, then how can people believe in that company? People can not believe that only FTA has approved this satellite. People want always success rate to invest their money in any corporation. Without knowing about success, they will always in fear to lose their money.
Investors always believe to invest their mony in good company. Company has made a satellite in ten years, which has been approved by FTA to compete with current satellite. Company has created only one satellite in ten years and this will compete with current satellite provider, but eighty percent of people were dissatisfied with current satellite provider. So how can this new satellite solve prople's problem? This satellite is made to compete current satellite provider. Hence, it will be as same as current satellite provider. So no new changes will come, so this is big flaw.
If people want to change satellite provider, then they will switch to this new satellite provider, but this satellite has not proven its ability to become more efficient than current satellite provider. So there is chance of wasting money of people. As well as it is dangrous for investors, who are willing to invest this company. This is a new company, so people would check the ability of that satellite, after they will change their satellite provider. So this is also a flaw.
Eventually, company has to prove that this new satellite will be more efficient as compare to currrent satellite. This will help developing trust for both investors and people also.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'investing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: investing
...op pick for investment toady. They urge to invest in new company. For first time they hav...
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Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'want'.
Suggestion: always want
...FTA has approved this satellite. People want always success rate to invest their money in a...
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Line 10, column 130, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
...e to currrent satellite. This will help developing trust for both investors and people als...
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Line 10, column 177, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ing trust for both investors and people also.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'as to', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241463414634 0.25644967241 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.170731707317 0.15541462614 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0829268292683 0.0836205057962 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0512195121951 0.0520304965353 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0414634146341 0.0272364105082 152% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.121951219512 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0390243902439 0.0416121511921 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72354123568 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0365853658537 0.026700313972 137% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.080487804878 0.113004496875 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0317073170732 0.0255425247493 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00975609756098 0.0127820249294 76% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2161.0 2731.13054187 79% => OK
No of words: 365.0 446.07635468 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.92054794521 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.347945205479 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.265753424658 0.287650121315 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175342465753 0.208842608468 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131506849315 0.135150697306 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72354123568 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 207.018472906 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.405479452055 0.469332199767 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.4413633342 52.1807786196 79% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 14.6 23.2022227129 63% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1802607863 57.7814097925 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.44 141.986410481 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6 23.2022227129 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.44 0.724660767414 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 41.1753424658 51.9672348444 79% => OK
Elegance: 1.52777777778 1.8405768891 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413144898744 0.441005458295 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.133573887449 0.135418324435 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.119478034033 0.0829849096947 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.475109173712 0.58762219726 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147782588644 0.147661913831 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157279426225 0.193483328276 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885363794961 0.0970749176394 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.451402456446 0.42659136922 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0669017344379 0.0774707102158 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294830013336 0.312017818177 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995451603338 0.0698173142475 143% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.33743842365 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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