"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twic

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"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument’s author asserts that amongst the two of the firms: adams realty and fitch realty, the former is superior to the latter when comparing the two in certain aspects.While it may be true considering different aspects of the construction business which the author might have not taken into consideration, it certainly isn’t true based on the evidence the author has given as it is rife with loopholes and assumptions.

Citing the real estate parameter for judging which amongst the two is superior, the author states that adams has 40 agents and fitch has 25, many of whom work part time.No doubt that is a relevant indicator but it lacks holistic approach when comparing the two. For instance, the 40 employees working in adams realty might not be as efficient as the 25 employees working in fitch making it more cost efficient while comparing the constant expenses which each of the firm has to bear.

Furthermore, the argument goes on to compare the two based on the revenue indicator. It states that adams’ revenue is twice as big as fitch when comparing the average of the home sales. The loophole in this evidence is that while adams’ may be having a higher revenue than fitch, they haven’t really told us about when both of them actually started with their companies. For example, adams realty maybe ten years old and earning that revenue whereas fitch might be only five years old and still not that far from adams realty surpassing the former in the long run.

Moreover, the author’s last evidence states that when trying out both personally, the experience was better with adams as compared to fitch as the house which the author was trying to sell was sold on adams quicker than fitch. This statement would definitely influence a person who’d choose between the two. But there is the biggest gap particularly in this statement when reading the whole passage as the ‘time’ factor is ignored substantially stating that ten years back the house was sold on fitch which took four months whereas recently a house that was put up on adams got sold in a months’ time. This statement certainly does not put adams in the forefront considering that there are a lot of factors which change in ten years’ time which could put fitch on the higher side when compared.

In conclusion, the author’s claims that as adams had higher real estate agents, bigger revenue and as the homes got sold in adams sooner than fitch irrespective of the time period, adams realty was bigger than fitch which is truly baseless and rife with gaps and holes. The arguments’ assumptions if prove unwarranted are fatal for fitch as it damages the reputation of the particular company and sends out the wrong analysis.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...en comparing the two in certain aspects.While it may be true considering different as...
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Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...nts and fitch has 25, many of whom work part time.No doubt that is a relevant indicator b...
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Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: No
...tch has 25, many of whom work part time.No doubt that is a relevant indicator but ...
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Line 7, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat when trying out both personally, the experience was better with adams as comp...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, whereas, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 13.6137724551 213% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 465.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97849462366 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72318361225 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468817204301 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.2907905296 57.8364921388 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.076923077 119.503703932 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.7692307692 23.324526521 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6923076923 5.70786347227 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467048428555 0.218282227539 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180609296129 0.0743258471296 243% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912515741097 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280668572613 0.128457276422 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698205107964 0.0628817314937 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.3550499002 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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