Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The arguments that the Palean’s baskets were not uniquely theirs since archeological samples of the baskets were found in the neighboring village; Litho may seem logical at first glance. The author makes a valid argument, one which would be correct only if some certain questions are answered. Additionally, the passage also uses terms that lack clarity and proper definition.
First, the author assumes that since woven baskets were found in the immediate vicinity of Palean village, they were made by the Palean’s. This argument is flawed, what makes us believe that the baskets are Palean’s and not Litho’s or from any other neighboring village? The fact that baskets are found in the Palean vicinity does not mean they are made by the inhabitant of the village. In an attempt to strengthen the argument, the details of the occupations by Palean’s must be accounted for. Are they crafters of useable items or otherwise? In fact, to be sure that the baskets were Palean’s an historical overview of their occupation is highly needed.
Secondly, the author assumed that since the river between Palean and Litho is broad and could only be crossed by boat (which evidence was not found) means the baskets were not uniquely Palean’s. If we assumed that the baskets are truly attributed to the Palean’s, what are the evidence to account for the following; were boats the only means of transportation between both villages? Was there any evidence of migration from Palean to Litho’s? Is there a proof of bi-lateral trades between both villages? What is the historical documentation of the primary activities in the Palean village? Surprisingly, boats might not have been the only means of transportation between both cities during those days. It is possible for that an alternative route exist. Moreover, the fact that Palean boats were not found cannot be used as a concrete justification that they have no boats to migrate. Even, if we assume that the Palean’s have no boats, the author failed to state if the Litho’s have boats or not. If the Litho’s do have boats, it is possible that the Litho’s migrate with their boats to buy woven baskets from the Palean’s. If this is so, certainly woven baskets that are uniquely Palean’s will be found in Litho’s. In order to strengthen the argument, I maintain that history survey of the villages must still be presented. The historical occupation of the habitant of both villages till extinction must be known, like wise their means of transportations.
Lastly, the word “particular distinctive pattern” is vague, lacks clarity, and must be properly defined. Was the basket made of a particular color; say red, green or blue? In order to remedy this flaw the word must be defined explicitly. Was there a specific design used by the Palean’s that could not be found in any other basket crafting villages. All this questions needs to be addressed by the author of the argument. Ultimately, Palean’s may be renowned for basket crafting and this may account for their economic growth. Consequently, their styles (Palean’s) may attract people from neighboring villages to learn and buy their crafted works. Through the passage of knowledge, styles and concepts will be imbibed in foreigners. This will be sufficient for explaining why Palean’s baskets are found in Litho.
Conclusively, because the argument makes an unwarranted assumption without proofs, it fails to make a convincing case that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean’s.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ets were not uniquely Palean's.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'in fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.250692520776 0.25644967241 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.159279778393 0.15541462614 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0664819944598 0.0836205057962 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0457063711911 0.0520304965353 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0235457063712 0.0272364105082 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112188365651 0.125424944231 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0415512465374 0.0416121511921 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.09876594773 2.79052419416 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0180055401662 0.026700313972 67% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.109418282548 0.113004496875 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235457063712 0.0255425247493 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.01108033241 0.0127820249294 87% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3618.0 2731.13054187 132% => OK
No of words: 574.0 446.07635468 129% => OK
Chars per words: 6.3031358885 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.57801047555 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.362369337979 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.294425087108 0.287650121315 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209059233449 0.208842608468 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.146341463415 0.135150697306 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09876594773 2.79052419416 111% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 207.018472906 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421602787456 0.469332199767 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.8337410122 52.1807786196 96% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.039408867 140% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5 23.2022227129 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.2315432749 57.7814097925 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.214285714 141.986410481 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.2022227129 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 49.9425087108 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.7696969697 1.8405768891 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439888857359 0.441005458295 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.134017856607 0.135418324435 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.124727120832 0.0829849096947 150% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.507069511369 0.58762219726 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.20283237266 0.147661913831 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169279150564 0.193483328276 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994598402348 0.0970749176394 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.49346123287 0.42659136922 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.177312943297 0.0774707102158 229% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.297011811844 0.312017818177 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870703753383 0.0698173142475 125% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.82512315271 228% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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