Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
The author of the argument concludes that the purported decline in populations is result of their failure to follow age-old migration patterns over frozen sea. For this conclusion, the author uses the two evidences: 1) according to reports from local hunters there is decline in deer populations 2) recent global warming trends causes have caused the sea ice to melt and allowing deer to cross the sea. Although the evidence appears to bolster the argument, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. The author needs the following evidence to make the argument more sounding: 1) An authentic governm...
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Sentence: It might possible that only one or two had reported or that the deer were simply on other islands when hunters were looking for them.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to might and possible
Sentence: It may possible last year's decline in the populations increase the demand for deer's meat and horns in the illicit market which encourages in turn beget overhunting.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to may and possible
Sentence: To sum up, the author fail to substantiate his claim that the decline in the arctic deer populations is due to the hindrance in their traditional migration pattern and needs to provide specific evidences to better evaluate the argument.
Description: The fragment author fail to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace fail with verb, past tense
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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