Argument 2 Rhesus monkey firstborn stress cortisol

Essay topics:
Argument 2 Rhesus monkey firstborn stress cortisol

The following appeared as part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal.
"A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."
--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
The author observed high levels of cortisol in firstborn infant monkeys in stimulating environment compared with that of its siblings. The author attributes this phenomenon to firstborns showing greater level of stimulation. However, this result could easily explained by other means.

Assuming that the experimental data is significant, there could be many alternatives to explaining this situation that could not be eliminated before more evidence is provided.

The author does not provide details of the experiment. Do the subjects of the test come from the same mother? Are the subject tested together at the same time? It could just be that firstborns are older during the time of the test, and thus have a greater cognitive understanding of the outside stimuli. Even if the experiments are conducted separately, there could be other explanations.

For example, the author does not specify whether the high level of cortisol released is actually synthesized by the monkey due to stress, or as a side effect from the mother. It could simply be that high stress level experienced by first time mothers produced excess cortisol that passed on to its infant. The infant, used to high levels of cortisol, receptors sensitive to cortisol might be damaged, thus the infant would continue to synthesize cortisol at high levels at all times while exhibiting the same level of response to stress. Another scenario would be that, being firstborn, the infant received more attention from a caring mother, while later offspring were given less attention. Thus the firstborn would naturally feel more stress when less attention was paid to it, such as when parents leave or faced with a stranger. Its siblings, used to receiving less attention would show less stress.

Another explanation could simply be due to the age of the mother in question—younger mothers tend to be healthier, and giving birth to more alert offspring. As a general rule, first time mothers tend to be younger than experienced ones. Without further detail regarding mother’s age, it would be impossible to tell.

Votes
Average: 8.3 (4 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

flaws:
This is a new GRE essay topic which is a bit different to those arguments essays.

You don't need to find flaws from the arguments but are asked to 'discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation...'

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 336 350
No. of Characters: 1701 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.281 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.544 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5