"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the

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"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the

In the above letter, the writer claims that if the number of moped rental is reduced then the number of accidents in the Balmer Island can be reduced. There is lot of ambiguity in the letter, since the letter does not clearly mention the reasons for the accidents, other vehicles used in the island road condition and the speed limit imposed. Hence, there is no clear explanation of why this method should be implied.

The letter states that, during summer the population in the Balmer Isaland increases, but does not state that during this time the accidents are more; if the accidents were more during this period of the year then that would be a reason for the reduction in the moped rental. But, here there is no clear indication of during which period the accidents are more or if the author is talking about the entire year.

Also, nothing has been mentioned about the speed limit. Maybe, the speed limit in the Balmer Island is more and that is the reason for the accidents. Hence, if the speed limit is reduced then the number of accidents might be reduced. Maybe the Seaville island reduced the speed limit and hence there were successful in reducing the number of accidents. The author should clearly state the other measures that were taken by the Seaville island and not just about the reduction in the moped rental.

The author says that 50 percent of reduction in accidents could be achieved by reducing the number of rentals. But, the author does not mention anything about the road condition in the Balmer islands. In Seaville island, the road conditions might be good, speed limit was less than Balmer island and they also reduced the number of rentals. All these measures might have led to the reduction in number of accidents in Seaville.

The author does not mention anything about the road condition in Balmer island, neither he talks about the speed limit or about the traffic rules in Balmer island. In order to make decision and to take measures in reducing the number of accidents, all the necessary statistics should be provided. Hence, the above letter is specious and cannot be considered for taking a decision about the above mentioned action.

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Well, you are improved. Currently your big issue is: No. of Different Words: 132, the ideal one is 200.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1759 1500
No. of Different Words: 132 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.678 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.187 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.022 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.416 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5