"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the

The author states that in order to control the number of accidents caused by mopeds in Balmer, the island officials should follow the same policies as the neighbor island, Seaville. However, not enough information are present to make the argument as clear as it needs to be. Actually, the answer to a variety of questions is required before one can make a decision to weather follow the presented advice or not.

First of all, there should be more information about the mentioned 100,000 population during the summer. It is not directly stated that have much the population of the island originally is, and therefore the reader cannot understand that what portion of this population is added during the summer. However, still if we consider that the added population is considerable, it is important to ask whether these new arriving people that come to island, only go to near beach or other entertainment sites of the island and spend most of their time there, or they usually go to the various spots of the island for activates such as shopping, and tend to move from place to place during the day. Obviously, in the first case, their need for transportation is very limited because they only need go to the beach for example, and come back in the evening. But, in the later case, their need to transportation and probably mopeds is noticeable. Hence, it should become clear that to what extent this extra population can affect transportation.

Second of all, some questions need to be answered about the architecture of the streets in the Balmer island. If the streets are wide then, officials can resolve the accident problems simply by constructing large pedestrian walks, or conversely, assign the mopeds a special lane in the street. Besides, it should be asked whether the architecture of Balmer is similar to Seaville or not. Because if their architecture is not identical, then, using the same policies probably will not be as efficient as it needs to be.

Finally, a wide range of inquiries should be answered about other possible factors that reduced the accidents in Seaville. One should ask, is there any solid evidence that limitations on the number of the mopeds were the sole cause of reduction in accidents? In fact, there might have been a decrease in the population of visitors of Seaville in the last summer, or maybe the accidents were reduced because moped riders suddenly started to be more careful after they experienced many accidents in the previous summer. Besides, even if limiting the number of rental mopeds has been the only engaging factor, regarding the population of Seaville and Balmer, there might be need to put more or less limitations, rather than the exact decline from 50 to 25. But, none of these can be decided for sure if not enough information is accessible.

All in all, the author should have added more data from Seaville if he wants to recommend the policies used in that island, for Balmer. Besides, many more information about the population that arrives to Balmer at summers has to be provided. But, undoubtedly, in its current state the argument is not persuasive and is unlikely to have the desired influence as the author wants.

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Sentence: Actually, the answer to a variety of questions is required before one can make a decision to weather follow the presented advice or not.
Description: The fragment weather follow the is rare

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1.The author simply equates the situation in T to that of B without any evidence to show that this two places are entirely comparable. Maybe in B, the accidents are mostly result from the poor road condition and the pedestrians' ignorance of the traffic law, thus reduce the use of mopes will have nothing to do with the improvement of accident condition.

2. There is no direct relationship between the amount of mopes and the number of accidents. Other reason will lead to accidents rather than the mount of mopes such as whether the mope rider are comply with the cross-regulation and the traffic situation as well as the road condition.

3. Even though the number of mopes really related to the accident, the reduce of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies will not attributes to the decrease of mopes's number if most of the islander have their own mopes.

4. It is unwarented that the annual reduction in moped accidents by 50 percent is caused by the limits on moped rentals. There are others reasons might lead to the reduction. Such as the renovation of the road, or strict punishment on violation of traffic road is established.

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