Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.Write a response in which you discuss the extent

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Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.

Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Those in power needs five years or more to become real leaders in any field. No matter what they are in, business, politics, or even education, gaining respect, trust, and reliability is crucial in forming leadership. They have to get rid of the influence of the former leader, establishing their own style of work. And they still need time to let others believe in them in order to lead successfully.

First, they need to get rid of the influence of the ex-ruler. The last one might set up his own type of leading, such as the way he makes decision and how he face problems. Furthermore, there must be some bad habit having existed for a long time, which have to be rectified. Despite of all these, the new conductor needs time to accustom to habit of other coworkers. After that, this new guy can finally figure out how to build a new way of working and try to convince others to accept it. He needs time to correct all the wrong things in his eyes and establish new rules, for instance. That's why those in power have to step down.

Second, they demand time to make others trust their leader. The employees, for example, deserve one that has ability to direct them to prosper and success, and can surely do so by a way which they can adapt. In addition, They don't want a mighty one let makes their company the most wealthy one but ask them to work too hard. On the other hand, workers should avoid their boss too merciful to encourage them or sometimes give them pressure to work hard. The most important part is this new coming one have to win their trust successfully so as to succeed in this field. However, this takes time, maybe five years.

In the end, those in power should step down after five years, no matter in what field. The path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. A good leader needs time to get rid of the influence of the former one such as bad way to make decisions. Moreover, the best leadership needs the trust of others working with him. These two takes courage, diligence, resolution, and, needless to say, time. Five years are a good period for a boss at work becoming leader to hearts.

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Sentence: The last one might set up his own type of leading, such as the way he makes decision and how he face problems.
Description: The fragment he face problems is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace face with verb, past tense

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