Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.

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Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.

When it comes to education,we must considerate the responsibility of the educational institutions.what's the responsebility of educational institutions?there are many responsebilities,for example,about the fields of study.Is the responsebility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed?i don't think so. As far as the aim of education,the goal of educational Institution is not noly to make students have a fully developed individual but also to cultival more elites and special talents for society in every field.so for educational institution, i think It is not wise that the school dissuade student from studying the unsecced fields.

Firstly,i think the educational institution should supply more opportunities to lead student to learn more knowleage about more fields,other than limite the study fields.because It can broden their horizon and can find their interesting.an old saying"Interest is the best teacher",if you are interested in it,it is possible that you can susecced in every field.without interesting,without motivation,without more creations.if the college don't pay more attention to student's interesting,they maybe will lose some talent,and these students will not take the responsibilty to do his work after graduate. Although nowadays the job makert is too fierce,in order to find a good job,most people think students should to learn the major in the succeed fields. for school,it is should to induce students to develop with their interesting,character and actual situation.therefore,school should try to let student to study more fields depending on their interesting,no matter succeed or insucced fields.and educational institutions should try to find and cutivate student's interesting.becausee some students don't realize their interestings about some fields,school should induce them to learn.for example,school can take some methods to incentive students to cultivate their interesting.such as open more elective course,increase the scholarship and so forth.

Secondly,about succeed fields and unsucceed fileds,which is succeed filed?which is not?who know?i think,it is different in different age. as ancient Greek philosopher said:"there is nothing permanent except change."succeed fields and unsucceed fields are changable with the development of the society.we can't say the succeed field is permenant successful field.for example:in the twentieth century,the rapid development field is electronic information field,and the succeed field is regarded as electronic information field.then some professional person speculate that the major topic of the twenty-first century is biology,the twenty-first century is the biology century.this term of biology is too vugue,and defined as life sicence in new century.it is deemed to the rapid succeed field after the development of physic and chemistry.nowaday it is developing very quickly and biology technique is used in many fields. thus,the succeed fields is variational qucikly sometimes,not steady.It is just guessed.

In sum up,for these resons above,i disagree with this statement.i consider that educational institutions have a responsibility to supply the more chances to learn in more fields other than to dissuade students from persuing fields of the study In which they are unlikely succeed.educational institutions should try to stimulate and cultivate students' interesting.nothing is impossible,maybe they will succeed in which are regared as unlikely successful fields.

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Sentence: Therefore, although the statement is well-intentioned, none of professors and educators have capabilities of appraising students so as to dissuade them from pursing fields they are bound to fail.
Error: well-intentioned Suggestion: well intentioned
Error: pursing Suggestion: No alternate word

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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.273 0.35

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2563 1500
No. of Different Words: 278 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.136 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.902 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.696 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.443 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.273 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

You wrote the essay with good examples. I may give this essay 5.0. But it will not more than 5.0 if it is in the real exam.

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It marked 6.0. while you got 4.5. The main reason is that the Use of Discourse Markers (%): for this essay is 0.385, but for your essay is 0.652. Discourse Markers shows the ability to use the language. You can check out more on what is Discourse Markers online.

I read some essays in the book called “official guide to the GRE” by ETS, I found that in these essays scored either 5 or 6, the number of words is far more than 350(the ideal number of words). So I do not think that just writing approximately 350 words is enough in the real test. From my perspective, the ideal number is about 460 - 480 words. Am I right?