Educators should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
From the very start of the human civilisation quest for knowledge has been put up in the top priority. So goes the saying "knowledge is wealth". Man in the quest of knowledge has discovered every aspect of life, and so did he lived through it. Many a discoveries and inventions have been made in this un-finishing journey.
People in the very start learnt every thing through experience, though it was affective it was time consuming. So schools were established and people profound in certain aspects were made pedagogues. As a single person can not teach every thing, the aspects were virtually split into portions and assigned to persons profound in respective portions. As the education system evolved, lot of changes have been brought. People interested in a pirticular field were allowed to have a deep study in that respective field. Hence started the concept of 'curriculum', this time pertaining to respective interests.
But now a days knowledge is being looked about in a narrow view. In past years, it took many ameanings from equivalent to marks to weight of a pay cheque. Educational instutes have started making fixed curriculum for a certain field. For years through the same curriculum is taught and studied. Institutions have been focusing on ways to get their students a better job with a better pay, rather than making a person useful to society. This has already induced narrow mindedness in the youth, so called back bone of any country; developed or developing.
As the time changes, every thing keeps changing, so should be the curriculum. Very less student realize this fact, but the educators should consider this. Including student intrest topics in the curriculum would increase the students fondness towards gaining knowledge rather than just learnig to pass exams. Subjects in which less people show interest can be made as electives while subjects attracting large number of students can be made major courses. This would build up more enthusiasm in students in gaining practical knowledge.
So educators must include what a student wants in the curriculum. This would revolutionise the education system, yielding not only good students but also a responsible citizen.
Sentence: Very less student realize this fact, but the educators should consider this.
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Sentence: Including student intrest topics in the curriculum would increase the students fondness towards gaining knowledge rather than just learnig to pass exams.
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Suggestion: Refer to students and fondness
Sentence: This would revolutionise the education system, yielding not only good students but also a responsible citizen.
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Suggestion: Refer to would and revolutionise
Sentence: From the very start of the human civilisation quest for knowledge has been put up in the top priority.
Error: civilisation Suggestion: civilization
Sentence: People interested in a pirticular field were allowed to have a deep study in that respective field.
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Sentence: In past years, it took many ameanings from equivalent to marks to weight of a pay cheque.
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Sentence: Educational instutes have started making fixed curriculum for a certain field.
Error: instutes Suggestion: ?
Sentence: Including student intrest topics in the curriculum would increase the students fondness towards gaining knowledge rather than just learnig to pass exams.
Error: intrest Suggestion: interest
Error: learnig Suggestion: learning
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