The following appeared in an article in a medical journal: "The major increase in new cases of adult-onset diabetes during the past decade is the result of poor nutrition, which is itself the result of a lack of government control over the quality of fo

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The following appeared in an article in a medical journal:

"The major increase in new cases of adult-onset diabetes during the past decade is the result of poor nutrition, which is itself the result of a lack of government control over the quality of foods available at low prices. If the government placed more emphasis on proper nutrition by requiring that food manufacturers include more vitamins and minerals in their products, the rate of adult-onset diabetes would be reduced significantly."

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. Point out flaws in the argument's logic and analyze the argument's underlying assumptions. In addition, evaluate how supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the argument's conclusion. You may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to strengthen the argument or what changes would make the argument more logically sound.

The argument that the recent increase of adult-onset diabetes is caused by the low-quality food and the illness rate would be reduced if foods were made more nutritious fails to analyze the issue exhaustively and overlooks important aspects to substantiate the reasoning. The article proposes that a governmental regulation for high-quality food at low prices would solve the problem. However, the proposal does not base on a sound fact basis and makes invalid assumptions.

First of all, the supposed fact given in the article is not analyzed well enough to drive the conclusion that the increase in adult-onset rate is caused by low-nutritious food. The increase of the onset rate may result from other factors like lack of physical activities or from factors which are not known today. The article is erroneous by its claim because it does not base on any rigorous analysis.

Second, the article does not have any data proving that the increased diabetes rate is caused by low-priced foods. Even if it is true that food is the main cause for increased rate of diabetes-onset among adults, there is no evidence showing that the low-priced foods are the cause and not the high-priced ones. The article makes an important assumption for its reasoning without any back-up from evidence.

The reasoning could be substantiated with exhaustive analysis of the way of living of people who have diabetes. Only after such an analysis one can recognize patterns, which cause the illness, common to most diabetes sick people and propose a solution.

In summary, the article fails to do an exhaustive analysis of the given fact and basis its proposal on a significant assumption which is not backed by evidence.

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