The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involv
The author stated that there are a strong inverse relationship between the number of mopeds rented during the summer months on Balmer Island and the number of accidents which involve mopeds and pedestrians. This association is based on personal opinion, because there is not sufficient evidence to support author´s argument.
First, we need to know more information about the main causes of accidents. For example, are there special cartways where mopeds can circulate? Are there specific rules for moped´s drivers? Or are there traffic signals at the streets of Balmer Island? The number of accidents could be associated with traffic signals inefficiency; therefore, reduce the number of mopeds rented is not the solution to their problem.
Second, author argues that the town council of Balmer Island must reduce the number of mopeds rented from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season to diminish the number of accidents, but he don’t give facts to buttress his opinion. The number of mopeds necessary to transport is directly proportional to the number of inhabitants. The population increases during the summer; consequently, there will be a proportional augment in the number of necessary mopeds. If the town council reduces the number of mopeds rented, how will people travel?
Third, author appears to base his argument on a comparison between Balmer Island and Seaville Island, but it is important to know more information about that island, is it smaller or bigger than Balmer Island? How many people live there? Or is there a similar increase in tourist flow during the summer?
On the other hand, one can logically conclude based on the information provided in the passage that Seaville Island is similar to Balmer Island. In the same way, the actions to limit the number of mopeds rented on Balmer Island will produce similar results in the number of moped accidents that those reached on Seaville Island.
In conclusion, there are any gaps in the argument, numerous important variables are absent from the information presented that would substantiate the text; moreover, the author is assuming causal relationships between two pieces of information that are not necessarily true.
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Sentence: The author stated that there are a strong inverse relationship between the number of mopeds rented during the summer months on Balmer Island and the number of accidents which involve mopeds and pedestrians.
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Sentence: This association is based on personal opinion, because there is not sufficient evidence to support authors argument.
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Sentence: For example, are there special cartways where mopeds can circulate?
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Sentence: The number of accidents could be associated with traffic signals inefficiency; therefore, reduce the number of mopeds rented is not the solution to their problem.
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Sentence: Third, author appears to base his argument on a comparison between Balmer Island and Seaville Island, but it is important to know more information about that island, is it smaller or bigger than Balmer Island?
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Sentence: For example, are there special cartways where mopeds can circulate?
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Score: 5.0 out of 6.0
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 357 350
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No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.056 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.591 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
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No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.747 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.624 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
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