The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author recommends to prohibit skateboarding, in order to ensure that business in Central Plaza returns to its previously high levels.He arrives on the conclusion based on the premise that that the skateboard users are the primary reason for the decrease in his business .Though the underlying issue has some merit,but due to weak assumptions and vague termnologies ,the recommendation is unsubstaintated and deeply flawed.I wish to expose these flaws in order to better evaluate the recommendation.
First of all, he arrives at his conclusion by singling out the skateboard users as the cause for the decline in his business popularity. There may have been other plausible reasons as well.For example, a better shopping plaza might have been opened near by .This is a serious flaw.Are we to assume that decline in popularity is solely due to skateboard users?
On the same line, he blames skate board users for the dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza.He doesnt provide any evidence of any skateboard user caught in the act.There may have been other miscreants who were the cause for the act.For example, a ruffian gang might have zeroed on central plaza as their new target.The vandalism and the arrival of skateboard users may just have been a pure coincidence.
And then ,he states that his view is echoed by "Many Central Plaza store owners".But he never specifies who are these "Many Central Plaza store owners".They could easily be only a specific group whose bussines is affected due to influx of the skateboard users.For instance this group might be the owners of Fun parks or similar recreational activities, whose popularity might have take a hit due to the new rage Skateboarding.This flaw is too glaring to ignore.Are we to assume the opinion of some Central plaza store owners is acknoweledged by all store owners?
The recommendation is not likely to have the predicted result due to the vagueness and the flaws in the argument .It is very weak owing to the above mentioned conspicuous questions.But then if the author includes the answers to these questions it would definitely help to evaluate the recommendation.
Sentence: The author recommends to prohibit skateboarding, in order to ensure that business in Central Plaza returns to its previously high levels.He arrives on the conclusion based on the premise that that the skateboard users are the primary reason for the decrease in his business .Though the underlying issue has some merit,but due to weak assumptions and vague termnologies ,the recommendation is unsubstaintated and deeply flawed.I wish to expose these flaws in order to better evaluate the
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Sentence: On the same line, he blames skate board users for the dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza.He doesnt provide any evidence of any skateboard user caught in the act.There may have been other miscreants who were the cause for the act.For example, a ruffian gang might have zeroed on central plaza as their new target.The vandalism and the arrival of skateboard users may just have been a pure coincidence.
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Sentence: The author recommends to prohibit skateboarding, in order to ensure that business in Central Plaza returns to its previously high levels.He arrives on the conclusion based on the premise that that the skateboard users are the primary reason for the decrease in his business .Though the underlying issue has some merit,but due to weak assumptions and vague termnologies ,the recommendation is unsubstaintated and deeply flawed.I wish to expose these flaws in order to better evaluate the
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Sentence: some Central plaza store owners is acknoweledged by all store owners?
Error: acknoweledged Suggestion: acknowledged
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