The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice for a client.
Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil.
The recommendation needs to be taken with a grain of salt. Some of the evidences are given without careful examination, and some of the unstated assumptions are not supported by sufficient evidences.
A unstated assumption is that the tradition of using oil as the major fuel for heating will continue to persist. This assumption is not supported by any evidence. The price of oil is known to be volatile, and therefore the demand of oil can change rapidly with the price. So it is hardly predictable that the consumption of oil for heating in the northeastern region will persist or even grow as ...
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