The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine. "A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
In the passage a report on study of average number of hours sleep required per night for 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives is presented. According to author, the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms are associated to each other. Based on several questionable premises and weak assumptions, it is concluded in the article that success of buisness depends on number of people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night.
The presented study has been carried out with a small group of people and whether they refer to same type of firm or different,...
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Sentence: Based on several questionable premises and weak assumptions, it is concluded in the article that success of buisness depends on number of people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night.
Error: buisness Suggestion: business
Sentence: In-spite of observing the amount of sleep needed for marketing executives, the average number of hours they can work with higher efficiencies should be examined to decide the workability of executives.
Error: workability Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To hire only people who require sleep less than 6 hours for the success of buisness can have adverse effects also because work efficiency of such kind of people can be lower.
Error: buisness Suggestion: business
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