GRE Issue1
As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
When ancient people began to use simple tools, made of stone or bone, to cut meat and put them on the fire in order to make the food taste more delicious, they were actually use technologies to develop themselves. Step by step, people continue to invent new tools, and, consequently, the product efficiency was increased to a great extent. New technology provides better way to solve problems and push the society from the Agricultural Age into the Industrial Age, and now it’s the Age of Digital Information. However, as people rely more on technology, people can save a lot of time and do more cr...
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Sentence: Admittedly, people may become slaves of technology if we rely too much on it while lose the ability of independent thinking.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to while and lose
Sentence: However, as people rely more on technology, people can save a lot of time and do more creational work, so there is no need for us to worry about the losing of thinking.
Error: creational Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 704 350
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Score: 6.0 out of 6
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
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No. of Words: 704 350
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No. of Different Words: 307 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.151 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.638 4.6
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No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence Length SD: 8.865 7.5
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