An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The above statement make the argument that in order to combat the vitamin A deficiency present in the people of Tagus, the government should encourage the production of a new breed of millet that is rich in vitamin A. As it stands, the rigor of the given statement is weak because it fails to provide crucial information that can help elucidate or strengthen the presented argument.
First of all, the statement needs to provide data on the prevalence and distribution of vitamin A deficiency in Tagus. It may be that only a small percentage of the population is affected by vitamin A deficiency, ...
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Sentence: The above statement make the argument that in order to combat the vitamin A deficiency present in the people of Tagus, the government should encourage the production of a new breed of millet that is rich in vitamin A. As it stands, the rigor of the given statement is weak because it fails to provide crucial information that can help elucidate or strengthen the presented argument.
Description: The fragment statement make the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, past tense
Sentence: Furthermore, we need to provided with information on why the proposed method of solving vitamin A deficiency is the best in comparison to other alternatives.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and provided
Sentence: Overall, the argument posited in the above statement can be improved if the author provides us with a detailed set of information that address all the aspects of adopting the new millet type and the efficacy of this measure in comparison with alternative ways of solving the issue of vitamin deficiency.
Description: The fragment that address all is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace address with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
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Score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
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Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.849 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.638 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.777 2.4
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Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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