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“A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.”


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By karimkhan - Posted on 20 May 2011

Education pattern and the content of the primary to higher secondary education is the base to construct the strong building in the form of Powerful Youth. Curriculum pattern and contents used during this education period also effects the knowledge of the students. To maintain the uniqueness in the country, it is required that all students study under the same curriculum during their education up to the College period.

Students living in the villages and rural area are given the curriculum different from the top city schools then it may bring the level of those village student down. After completing the secondary and higher secondary education when these rural area students come in the colleges and they have to compete them selves with other students who have studied under the higher level curriculum then it become tough for them to keep themselves in the list of top students. Because the contents they going study in the college time has already been study by other students who study in the higher level curriculum.

I did my study in the State board education curriculum. Then when I completed my higher secondary education and entered in the college then I saw that some of the students who have study in the Central Education board and Internation education board has already learned some of the parts which I was going to study in the college. Their knowledge was also higher compare to me as the content they have study in their board I did not get chance to study that.

This type of problem can make student to feel frustrated when he can not put his self in competition with other students. Uniqueness of the curriculum for all the students can prevent this type of the problem.
If the curriculum of all the students is not same then in case of admission in college after their higher secondary education may lead to the problem. In this can keeping same criteria for all the students may make injustice for some of the students. Because some students who have study in easy curriculum would have scored more compare to those who have study in the tough curriculum.

If there is different curriculum pattern in different stated of the nation then according to the level and contents of the education, knowledge and inelegancy of the student from different states will also vary. So it may happen that students from some state have good knowledge while other are lagging.

Maintaining same education level in all the students of the nation and preventing from all these problems uniqueness of the curriculum is essential. For maintaining the healthy environment in the college where the youth of the country is developed, same curriculum pattern is crucial. So summing up all these points we can say that a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

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Sentence: Education pattern and the content of the primary to higher secondary education is the base to construct the strong building in the form of Powerful Youth.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: Curriculum pattern and contents used during this education period also effects the knowledge of the students.
Description: The fragment period also effects is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace also with adjective
Sentence: To maintain the uniqueness in the country, it is required that all students study under the same curriculum during their education up to the College period.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and study
Sentence: Students living in the villages and rural area are given the curriculum different from the top city schools then it may bring the level of those village student down.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to curriculum and different
Sentence: After completing the secondary and higher secondary education when these rural area students come in the colleges and they have to compete them selves with other students who have studied under the higher level curriculum then it become tough for them to keep themselves in the list of top students.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: Because the contents they going study in the college time has already been study by other students who study in the higher level curriculum.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: I did my study in the State board education curriculum.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: Then when I completed my higher secondary education and entered in the college then I saw that some of the students who have study in the Central Education board and Internation education board has already learned some of the parts which I was going to study in the college.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: Their knowledge was also higher compare to me as the content they have study in their board I did not get chance to study that.
Description: The fragment was also higher is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace also with adjective
Sentence: This type of problem can make student to feel frustrated when he can not put his self in competition with other students.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: Uniqueness of the curriculum for all the students can prevent this type of the problem.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: If the curriculum of all the students is not same then in case of admission in college after their higher secondary education may lead to the problem.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: In this can keeping same criteria for all the students may make injustice for some of the students.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to can and keeping
Sentence: Because some students who have study in easy curriculum would have scored more compare to those who have study in the tough curriculum.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: If there is different curriculum pattern in different stated of the nation then according to the level and contents of the education, knowledge and inelegancy of the student from different states will also vary.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: So it may happen that students from some state have good knowledge while other are lagging.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: Maintaining same education level in all the students of the nation and preventing from all these problems uniqueness of the curriculum is essential.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to problems and uniqueness
Sentence: For maintaining the healthy environment in the college where the youth of the country is developed, same curriculum pattern is crucial.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: So summing up all these points we can say that a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
No grammatical errors

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Sentence: Students living in the villages and rural area are given the curriculum different from the top city schools then it may bring the level of those village student down.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to curriculum and different

Can you please suggest, How I should structure this sentence ?

Sentence: Curriculum pattern and contents used during this education period also effects the knowledge of the students.
Description: The fragment period also effects is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace also with adjective

Can you please write this in your way??

You used sentence correctly. here is just a gram check, basically errors are related to gram, nothing wrong with sentence.

For the first sentence, since we used an e-rater, it is not smart enough to check out 'curriculum different ' is equal to 'curriculum whcih is different'. The e-rater consider 'curriculum different' should be ' different curriculum '. we will need to imporve the e-rater.sorry for the error report.

for the second sentence "Curriculum pattern and contents used during this education period also effects the knowledge of the students.", the subject is "Curriculum pattern and contents", the verb should 'affect', but you used 'affects'. i figured out most of your problems are something like this.

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After writing there much essay if this error does not improve then it's my fault only. Next time I will take care of it surely...

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Sentence: Education pattern and the content of the primary to higher secondary education is the base to construct the strong building in the form of Powerful Youth.
No spelling errors
Sentence: Curriculum pattern and contents used during this education period also effects the knowledge of the students.
No spelling errors
Sentence: To maintain the uniqueness in the country, it is required that all students study under the same curriculum during their education up to the College period.
No spelling errors
Sentence: Students living in the villages and rural area are given the curriculum different from the top city schools then it may bring the level of those village student down.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: After completing the secondary and higher secondary education when these rural area students come in the colleges and they have to compete them selves with other students who have studied under the higher level curriculum then it become tough for them to keep themselves in the list of top students.
No spelling errors
Sentence: Because the contents they going study in the college time has already been study by other students who study in the higher level curriculum.
No spelling errors
Sentence: I did my study in the State board education curriculum.
No spelling errors
Sentence: Then when I completed my higher secondary education and entered in the college then I saw that some of the students who have study in the Central Education board and Internation education board has already learned some of the parts which I was going to study in the college.
No spelling errors
Sentence: Their knowledge was also higher compare to me as the content they have study in their board I did not get chance to study that.
No spelling errors
Sentence: This type of problem can make student to feel frustrated when he can not put his self in competition with other students.
No spelling errors
Sentence: Uniqueness of the curriculum for all the students can prevent this type of the problem.
No spelling errors
Sentence: If the curriculum of all the students is not same then in case of admission in college after their higher secondary education may lead to the problem.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In this can keeping same criteria for all the students may make injustice for some of the students.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Because some students who have study in easy curriculum would have scored more compare to those who have study in the tough curriculum.
No spelling errors
Sentence: If there is different curriculum pattern in different stated of the nation then according to the level and contents of the education, knowledge and inelegancy of the student from different states will also vary.
Error: inelegancy Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: So it may happen that students from some state have good knowledge while other are lagging.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: lagging Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Maintaining same education level in all the students of the nation and preventing from all these problems uniqueness of the curriculum is essential.
No spelling errors
Sentence: For maintaining the healthy environment in the college where the youth of the country is developed, same curriculum pattern is crucial.
No spelling errors
Sentence: So summing up all these points we can say that a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
No spelling errors

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Average Sentence Length: 25.368
Sentence Length SD: 9.948
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.658
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.223

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