The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t

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The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape our position.

Although increase of efficiency is important, possibly the most one for some people, there are still many other reason of equal importance, or even much more essential. For example, there are special science aimed on how to heal the sick, trying to find out cures. Furthermore, some are created to make our lives more convenient. In the end, all the propose can be deduced to be one primary goal, to benefit our lives and make us lead lives with best quality as possible.

First, there are some categories of technology invented so as to heal the sick. Some are relating to biological technology which can cultivated antivirus and some other cures related to bacteria, some are interdisciplinary machines helping doctors diagnosing diseases and prolong the lives of the elders, and still others concerning the crucial elements such as EMT, making a counteract when some emergencies happen accidentally. All these kinds of invention are based on the purpose to sustain our lives, make us free from the danger of diseases, and try to prolong our lives.

What's more, still, there are a variety of tools created with great ideas and encouraging with the old desire of "sluggish", helping us to do many things we had to do by hands and make us more convenient. For incidences, there are machines helping us to create clothes, to wash dishes, to cook, or even make us travel more easily and faster. All the benefit leads to the convenience of our lives, leaving us more strength, thoughts, and time to leisure, to enjoy life, or to invent more advance technology.

In addition, all the creation, invention, and studies are relied on one longings lying deeply in everyone's heart, that is the wanting that we need better lives. The spirit of struggling for the best lives as we can drift us to use all our efforts, creativity, and knowledge to make the dreams come true. Even though the success doesn't come out overnight, the progression is putting us forward to a more beautiful, more happier, and, most important of all, more convenient world.

In the end, the primary goal of technology is trying to benefit our lives as much as possible, not the increase of leisure time resulting from the increase of efficiency, though still one of them. It is the drift deeply in our mind, as the instinctive reaction to survive or subsist, that directs and leads us into today's world, more healthy, more kinds of choices, and more convenient.

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Sentence: Some are relating to biological technology which can cultivated antivirus and some other cures related to bacteria, some are interdisciplinary machines helping doctors diagnosing diseases and prolong the lives of the elders, and still others concerning the crucial elements such as EMT, making a counteract when some emergencies happen accidentally.
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