"Twenty years ago Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is false, and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid. Because they are using the interview-centered method, my team of graduate students working in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Whether observation or interview is important when conducting a study has always been an area of search among scientists for decades. In the preceding statement, the author claims that Dr. Field`s observation- centered approach to studying cultures is invalid, and interview-centered method will prove a more accurate understanding if child -rearing traditions in island cultures. Though his claim may well have merit, the author presents a poorly reasoned argument. Based on several questionable premises and assumptions, and based on the evidence the author offers, we cannot accept his argument as...
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Sentence: For example, if many children were surveyed but only children from other islands except Tertian responded, the conclusion that children spend much more time talking abouttheir biological parents than about other adults would be highly suspected.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to abouttheir and biological
Sentence: The authors premises, the basis for his argument, lack any legitimate evidentary support and render his conclusion unaccepted.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to authors and premises
Sentence: Even if children spend much time speaking about their biological parents. it does not follow that they werent reared by an entire village.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to they and werent
Sentence: Without ruling out these and other possible factorsthat give rise to case, the author cannot confidently conclude that interview-centered method is more accurate to understand child-rearing traditions.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace give with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: While the author does have several key issues in his arguments premises and assumptions, that is not to say that the entire argument is without base.
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Suggestion: Refer to arguments and premises
Sentence: If the author hopes to change his readers minds on the issue, he would have to largely restructure his argument, fix the flaws in his logic, clearly explicate his assumptions, and provide evidentiary support.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to readers and minds
Sentence: Lacking ingormation about the number of children surveyed and the number of respondents, it is impossible to assess the validity of the results.
Error: ingormation Suggestion: information
Sentence: For example, if many children were surveyed but only children from other islands except Tertian responded, the conclusion that children spend much more time talking abouttheir biological parents than about other adults would be highly suspected.
Error: abouttheir Suggestion: about their
Sentence: Even if children spend much time speaking about their biological parents. it does not follow that they werent reared by an entire village.
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Sentence: Besides, the arguerdoes not provide any solid information concerning what kind of interview he conducted and what kind of questions he asked.
Error: arguerdoes Suggestion: argue does
Sentence: Without ruling out these and other possible factorsthat give rise to case, the author cannot confidently conclude that interview-centered method is more accurate to understand child-rearing traditions.
Error: interview-centered Suggestion: interview centered
Error: child-rearing Suggestion: child rearing
Error: factorsthat Suggestion: factors that
Sentence: Providing information about what kind of study he conducted and what kind of questions he asked and showing that respondents were represantatives of all children, he could improve his argument significantly.
Error: represantatives Suggestion: representatives
Sentence: In sum, the authors illogical argument is based on unsupported presimes and unsubstantiated assumptoins that render his conclusion invalid.
Error: assumptoins Suggestion: assumptions
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