"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Reality and Fitch Reality-Adams Reality is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part time. Moreover, Adams revenue last year was twice

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"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Reality and Fitch Reality-Adams Reality is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part time. Moreover, Adams revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sall faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when IS sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month.Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Reality."

The argument concludes that to sell homes quickly and at a good price, Adams Reality is superior than Fitch Reality.To support this assertion the argument cites the facts that Adams Reality has 40 real estate agents while Fitch Reality has 25, high revenues of Adams Reality and home sales that averaged $168,000, homes listed with Adams Reality sells faster.For numerous reasons, the premises mentioned in the argument lend to little support to the conclusion.

First of all, argument states that Adams reality take less than one month to sell the home last year where Fitch Reality took more than four months to sell a home ten years ago. so Adams reality is superior. But it is a comparison based on data of two different periods of time. There is no information provided for time taken by Adams Reality to sell a house ten years ago and for Fitch reality for last year. The conditions might be changed in the span of ten years. There might be increase in demand for houses in recent years than ten years ago.

Secondly, the argument provides evidence for superiority of Adams Reality in terms of number of real estate egents. But there is no information regarding the efficiency of the agents of two companies. More number of agents does not necesssiarly concludes that they sell homes faster and at high rate. Even , less number of agents may also sell homes faster and at a good rate.

Finally, in the argument high revenues and high home sales average is taken as an evidence for superiority of Adams Reality. But, a single parameter may not lead to a conclusion. further high revenues does not provide any evidence for fast selling of houses.Also, high average of home sale prices does not indicate the number of houses sold and time taken to sell the houses.

Thus, the argument is not logically convincing.The evidences in support of the conclusion has failed to provide information on the above mentioned argument. The argument might be strenghthened if the data regarding time taken to sell a house and price of houses in the same year were provided, the other parameters were also considered for comparison. Then the conclusion would be more convincing.

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Sentence: First of all, argument states that Adams reality take less than one month to sell the home last year where Fitch Reality took more than four months to sell a home ten years ago. so Adams reality is superior.
Description: The fragment reality take less is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace take with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular

Sentence: Secondly, the argument provides evidence for superiority of Adams Reality in terms of number of real estate egents.
Error: egents Suggestion: agents

Sentence: More number of agents does not necesssiarly concludes that they sell homes faster and at high rate.
Error: necesssiarly Suggestion: necessarily

Sentence: The argument might be strenghthened if the data regarding time taken to sell a house and price of houses in the same year were provided, the other parameters were also considered for comparison.
Error: strenghthened Suggestion: strengthened

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