Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The author proposes that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. In order to support this conclusion, the author has come up with certain evidences. However, on a deeper scrutiny none of the evidences lend credible support to the conclusion. Let us scrutinize them further.
Firstly, the author talks about archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos to support the conclusion. However, the argument depend on the assumption that this basket was made in the Lithos. Yet author provide no evidence to support this assumption. It is possible that as the Brim River is connecting both the villages, so the basket float with the river from Palea. Or it may be possible that the people of both the villages exchanged their goods and basket is one of those goods. Without eliminating this possibility, the author cannot rely on the assumption.
Secondly, the author talks about the brim river, which is very deep and broad, and so the ancient could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. However, the argument depends on the assumption that only Palean boats can cross the river. It is possible that he boats made by people of the Lithos are used to cross the sea. Yet the author provide no evidence to support this assumption. It may be possible that people of Lithos crossed it and took the basket to their side.
In conclusion, the author's conclusion is unpersuasive. To strengthen the topic, author must provide evidences to prove that their is no contact between the people of Palea and Lithos. Also, author must show that no boat is found, neither Palean boat nor Lithos boat.
Sentence: However, the argument depend on the assumption that this basket was made in the Lithos.
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Sentence: Yet author provide no evidence to support this assumption.
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Sentence: It is possible that he boats made by people of the Lithos are used to cross the sea.
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Sentence: Yet the author provide no evidence to support this assumption.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace provide with verb, past tense
Sentence: To strengthen the topic, author must provide evidences to prove that their is no contact between the people of Palea and Lithos.
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Suggestion: Refer to their and is
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