In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement

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In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Motivation is necessary for achieving the desired goal in difficult times. Without motivation negative results might surface. But a significant contribution doesn't need motivation in order to be achieved. It is ineluctable and can be achieved by someone who is well determined to do so. Therefore, it is very much inappropriate to say that significant contribution cannot be done without first being influenced by achievements.
The people who first achieved something did not have any motivation or achievement to look up to. It was achieved out of curiosity, necessity, determination etc. The people who first contributed are exalted for apposite reason. They had courage, determination and temerity to achieve something. Consider the example of scientist Galileo. He was ostracized by the church for proving them wrong. But his determination and curiosity was the reason he never gave up. As a result, his beliefs are accepted worldwide today. There was no past achievement to look up-to that time.
Also exemplifying contributions in other fields like politics. Leaders like Nelson Mandela fought against injustice caused to Africans. The necessity to overthrow various unscrupulous practices gave rise to the inevitable actions of African people. Nelson mandela never asked for any past achievement in this unmoral issue. If he would have waited for someone else to do something, Nelson Mandela wouldn't had been the man we know today. As a result he is very much praised and his morals are giving rise to revolutionary movements even today.
Moreover an artist who created something unique and redoubtable never imitates anyone, at least before the art of duplicity became widely known. The artist original creation is always valued for. Considering the example of William Shakespeare, the poems and plays written by Sir William Shakespeare are still extant throughout the world. The imitations are in various forms such as plays, computer games, movies, books, etc. Shakespeare didn't have anyone to imitate. It was the granted gift that allowed him to contribute so much. As a result he is considered a legend throughout the world.
Nonetheless, it is true that motivation is needed for many to carry on the work. Everyone wants them to be motivated by someone. A person carrying out some difficult task gets a positive energy if he is motivated by the manger. Suppose a worker having difficulty in coping up with other teammates, a motivation in this case plays a positive role. However, it is only to produce the expected results. The best result are although set by few are self motivated to achieve something.
Hence, in conclusion it is very wrong to say that past achievements are necessary for producing the best results or contributing in the best way. The people who do so are just malingerer and can only blame others for their failure.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'well', 'at least', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result', 'it is true']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239299610895 0.240241500013 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.198443579767 0.157235817809 126% => OK
Adjectives: 0.091439688716 0.0880659088768 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0544747081712 0.0497285424764 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0428015564202 0.0444667217837 96% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105058365759 0.12292977631 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0642023346304 0.0406280797675 158% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94814412071 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0369649805447 0.030933414821 119% => OK
Particles: 0.00583657587549 0.0016655270985 350% => OK
Determiners: 0.079766536965 0.0997080785238 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00972762645914 0.0249443105267 39% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011673151751 0.0148568991511 79% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2858.0 2732.02544248 105% => OK
No of words: 462.0 452.878318584 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18614718615 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.41341991342 0.366273622748 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.305194805195 0.280924506359 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.218614718615 0.200843997647 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.160173160173 0.132149295362 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94814412071 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 219.290929204 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554112554113 0.48968727796 113% => OK
Word variations: 66.7842927575 55.4138127331 121% => OK
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6194690265 170% => OK
Sentence length: 13.2 23.380412469 56% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8054371153 59.4972553346 50% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6571428571 141.124799967 58% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.2 23.380412469 56% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.514285714286 0.674092028746 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 43.7194805195 51.4728631049 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.38157894737 1.64882698954 84% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334440489665 0.391690518653 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0678973712208 0.123202303941 55% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0583686854402 0.077325440228 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.411102386638 0.547984918172 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.121241393049 0.149214159877 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971930343834 0.161403998019 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582159005227 0.0892212321368 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.261112866385 0.385218514788 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0464539054524 0.0692045440612 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209605396143 0.275328986314 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347379277639 0.0653680567796 53% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.4325221239 192% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88274336283 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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