The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The best way for society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry and other fields is instilling a sense of cooperation in them, rather than the sense of competition. When a sense of cooperation is instilled in young minds it increases teamwork efficiency, empathy for others and it allows people to feel the need to make small sacrifices for the greater good. The qualities which we expect to see in good leaders.

First of all, when a sense of cooperation is instilled on a young mind it increases the person's ability to work better in teams. Whether, we speak of societies or the government itself, whether its an industry or whether its business, everyone needs to work in teams to some extent for the sake of prosperity of their respective fields. A leader needs to understand his/her team members well and be able to work with them for the betterment of their organization. When a young person is taught to cooperate at an early age, he/she will eventually learn and understand to work better in teams in future, that in turns, will contribute in making a great and responsible leader out of him.

Secondly, learning to cooperate at an early age also teaches a person to be empathetic to other people's condition. They learn to sacrifice their needs for the greater good and put the goals of prosperity above all. A good leader is always expected to be empathetic of his/her team-workers, and sometimes is required to put the need of organization before his/her personal needs. Instilling the sense of cooperation at an young age can thus be an excellent idea.

Now, some may argue that a sense of competition will drive people to work more efficiently, a quality that is much observed in great leaders. However, the sense of competition is not necessarily the only driving factor behind that. A person can be motivated by many other factors such as empathy, love, patriotism and such. Instilling a sense of competition can cause a person to grow up as self centered. The desire to work efficiently can also be motivated by teammates who work on the same purpose.

In conclusion, it is safe to say that the best way to prepare young people is indeed by instilling a sense of cooperation in them, as it builds up the mentality of teamwork, makes people more empathetic towards others and teaches self sacrifice. Based on the given reason, I strongly stand with the notion that cooperation, and not competition should be instilled in young minds to make great leaders out of them in future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... and understand to work better in teams in future, that in turns, will contribute in maki...
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Suggestion: a
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...minds to make great leaders out of them in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82068965517 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81852955725 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452873563218 0.4932671777 92% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6509688392 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36251003723 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118098573872 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17247585371 0.0758088955206 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227350781708 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.186797605521 0.0667264976115 280% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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