The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

A glance at modern education sheds light on a questions that has instigated debate for long, that is, whether the sense of cooperation or competition should be emphasized in preparing youngsters for futher leadership. Some contend that the best way to do so is to solely focus on cooperation, instead of competition. I partly agree with the statement, since working with others is becoming increasingly important in a connected world. However, ignoring competition may make our future leaders over-optimistic or even slef-content, which is devastating in a competitive world.

Foremost, the spirit of cooperation should be infused to student's mind at an young age. We have to admit a disappointing fact that people are naturally reluctant to cooperation. The reason is simple: in cooperation people have to share their resources and their own brainchild with others, which can be unwise and risky in a competitive society. Nonetheless, cooperation is definitely becoming a necessity in today's world, and provisional people are advocating for it. Needless to say, if children are taught the spirit of cooperation when they are young, they may be more successful in the future.

In addition, there is no doubt that cooperation has become one of the main themes of today's society, and is going to be even more pivotal in the future. Therefore, it is imperative to foreground cooperation in educating the next generation. Multifarious aspect need to be considered in doing so. For instance, mutual respect is so important in cooperation that young people need to know how to get along well with others. What is more, the ability to organize is also crucial for cooperation, especially for leaders. Take the Human Genome Project as an example. This international endeavor consisted of more than ten countries and thousands of researchers, and took more than a decade to finish. Leading such a huge project requires the leaders to be highly capable.

However, we should bear in mind that competition between people, institutes and countries are always there. If a student only knows cooperation and has no sense of competitive, he or she would be unlikely to be a eligible leader in the future. Having a sense of competition makes us better prepared for catching up others, or avoid being catched up. The development of human society is essentially a history of competitions between countries and ethinics. Only by educating younger generation on competition can they be more competitive in future leadership.

Due to aforementioned, cooperation should absolutely be emphasized in educating future leaders in government, industry and other fields, but competition should not be overlooked at the same time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a question; questions
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Suggestion: a
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, no doubt, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28009259259 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18324576911 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539351851852 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.963262903 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1739130435 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7826086957 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154314711676 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450406266719 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448880290628 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908797372066 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482583188512 0.0667264976115 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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