The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

While the statement claims that the best way to prepare young people for leadership in government and industry is by fostering a sense of cooperation rather than competition, it would be short-sighted to hold this true in all circumstances. This dichotomy does not reflect the complex reality of government and industry where both cooperation and competition are required to succeed.

We live in a world that is inherently competitive. Governments only value the well-being of their own citizenry, often at the expense of those residing outside their jurisdiction. Private industry incorporates an environment where firms attempt to maximize profits in a zero-sum game that often results in financial losses for other companies. Therefore, this innate desire to win is essential to survival (avoid ambiguity or uncertainty in lines of argument), which means that it is foolish to neglect competitive pressures. To succeed as a leader, one must partake and thrive in this competitive world, from which it follows that a competitive leader will be more adept and successful than one focused solely on cooperation. Cooperation is often not even an option in many situations. Can Apple ask Samsung to focus on TV's and Cooking Stoves rather than phones? No, both companies are locked in a technological war to sell the greatest number of phones! Having a leader that does not possess this competitive nature would likely bring failure for their company.

On the other hand, one must consider: what is required to succeed in competition? In the competitive world of industry or government, cooperation within one’s organisation is necessary for success. A young person with a sense of cooperation would lead more effectively, and work together with their counterparts and co-workers more efficiently. Ultimately this would bring greater success than having a leader who only possesses a competitive edge. Hence, having a sense of cooperation can also have great benefits in industry, government, and other fields.

It is crucial to note than the competitive nature of government, industry, and other fields, as established above, does not necessarily extend to all facets that the body deals with. Consider the humanitarian support that many first world countries provide. The attribution of funds to some of the poorest countries and regions around the globe is generally devoid of any competitive desire – due to the innate giving nature of these actions. In these situations, a sense of cooperation is valued more than a sense of competition. In contrast, aid organizations must compete to obtain the resources and funds to do their work in these poor countries. Only limited funds exist in the budget and they must fight and compete with others to receive funding. Thus, although a cooperative sense is critical in these situations, a competitive nature is also necessary. A leader that lacks either of these is likely to fail, or at the minimum not be as successful as one who has both an instilled sense of cooperation as well competition.

Government, industry, or other fields such as these are innately competitive. One organisations success is ultimately the others downfall. For a body to succeed a strong sense of competition is required externally, while internal cooperation is also necessary for effective functioning. This allows a leader to possess the ability to work together with their contemporaries in order to obtain some sort of competitive goal. In some facets of these industries or governmental bodies a strong cooperative nature is more desirable, however, to completely forsake a competitive sense would be a mistake. In conclusion, in order for young people to succeed in government, industry fields both a strong sense of cooperation and competition must be instilled.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in contrast, sort of, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 58.6224719101 148% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3207.0 2235.4752809 143% => OK
No of words: 604.0 442.535393258 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30960264901 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95746018188 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11708275177 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44701986755 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1034.1 704.065955056 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4132527723 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.586206897 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8275862069 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75862068966 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162910252858 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483550822327 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530159051951 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108091891328 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357223800553 0.0667264976115 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 100.480337079 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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