The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
For any nation, young ones are pivotal assets of the country. They are the ones who will shape the future of the country and and society and move the flag of advancement of the mankind forward. Hence, it is important to groom them for their better personality so that they can judge the situation impaccuously and at the same time have the empathy for others. Since human is a social animal it is very important to have the sense of cooperation among the people to get success individually and also collectively for the society. While competition gives us the sense of achieving more and hunger for success, cooperation gives the proper sense of avnacement and way of collective improvement which in turn can be salubrious to our society. Hence, I agree with the given statemant that cooperation is a more cardial aspect on which young ones need to be groomed with respect to compitetion.
Firstly, a proper governance can be imposed where the leader of the goverment has the ability to gather all the people including the opposition party under same umberala of thought process. Beacause it is very imporatant characteristics of a leader to convince mass to pass new law or decision enforcement. On the other side, the opposition leader also need to stretch their helping hand for the growth of nation. Hence, coperation is the major factor in the leadership in governance to make it effective. For example, in India new Jan Lokpal bill was submitted to the parlament. Since it contains mass improvement of the poor people, all parties cooperated with the government to pass the bill in parlament. It is the cooperation that made this one a successful. If other parties were took the compition path then this bill may not get chance to pass in parlament.
Secondly, in industry innovation is a major criteria for advancement science, technology etc. If multiple companies only work separately on the sake of competive attitude then the benefits of cooperative innovation will get obviated. There so many examples when both company worked together and help each other for building good products and they have succeded. For exmaple, Steve Jobs once found problem in their C compiler of inability to floating-point numbers. Microsoft's Bill Gates has already a compiler which can handle this floating-point numbers. Insatead of taking competitive path, Steve Jobs asks Bill Gates to write a compiler for them and as a result Apple was able to perform timely delivery and satisly their customers. Hence, we can see it is cooperative nature of the CEO that helped the Apple to achieve success.
Thirdly, cooprtaion encourages and help the social welfare activities. Just like the proverb goes, Rome has not build in one day, similarly, one man individualy also can not build it. There must be collective effort to build the system. So a sense of cooperation in the young ones will encourage them in the social welfare activities. This will help our society to be a healthy and more prefarable for living.
Therefore, I believe while competitive attitude makes young person more goal oriented, it is the cooprative attitude that will bring more collective success for their life and also for the society. They can achieve more when they will work and share knowledge among other young ones and this will conduce the path of advancement of our society. Hence, coopeartive sense should be given priority over competitive sense when it is the matter of grooming young ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, while, for example, as a result, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2921.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 580.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03620689655 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7805908533 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468965517241 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 936.9 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5192968712 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.724137931 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.24137931034 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 10.2758426966 234% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177590398547 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478289347871 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369717665054 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10342900296 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455533294586 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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