The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The statement claims that in order to foster the leadership of young people, a society need to cultivate a sense of cooperation instead of competition. However, I fully disagree with such a statement, as both cooperation and competition are vital to the development of young people’s future career.
Admittedly, competition sometimes can lead young people to attack or assault their opponents(components). As we all know, some young people are immature and have difficulties in holding their temperament. By teaching them the sense of competition, they may lose themselves in pursuing the success at the cost of other people’s wellbeing. For example, aiming to win the game, a young person who has a strong competitive sense may play tricks on others in school’s sports meeting.
However, competition also plays a significant role in many economic activities. For example, the mobile phone industry has experienced a continuous development in the past several decades. Manufacturers, such as Apple, Samsung, etc, have invested plentitude of funds and human resources to develop the best products to compete with their opponents and attract more consumers. Only in the competitive market, the products can be advanced and customers can reap the benefits of more sophisticated mobile phones. Therefore, obviously, leaders in economic world must emphasise competition which can encourage its employees to pursue perfection and invent innovative products. As to young people, they should be taught to compete with their counterparts, and thereby be well prepared in their future career.
In addition, while it is true that competition makes a great contribution in the economic world, we shall not underestimate the importance of cooperation in the political world. The leadership in a government requires leaders to cooperate with other officials to do the right things. For example, the United States president Obama has pushed the law of health care to be enacted through the relentless cooperation with the congress and senators. Therefore, if a political leader aims to achieve the promise to increase the health care and living standards for the public, he or she must work with other government departments to fulfil the desired objectives.What the young generations can learn from the case is they need to be aware of the significance of cooperation and improve their team work abilities.
In sum, although excessive competition may result in assaults to rivals, competition is important for young people to be more prepared in the economic world. Also, the spirit of cooperation helps political leaders bring more benefits to the public. Therefore, these two senses are equally crucial in nurturing young people’s leadership.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, in addition, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2336.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48356807512 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1328312741 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537558685446 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7735338278 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.947368421 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174647688486 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571620113373 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419945739215 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10933544352 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364517940371 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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