Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Claim made by the author is that though young people often receive the advise to "follow your dreams", more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals. I agree with claim as people might have impragmatic dreams which are just impossible to achieve. So, people should pick worthy goals which are pragmatic.
For instance, son of a very big super star like Amitabh Bachan might have a dream to become like his father and know as the next Amitabh Bachan. However, we all have seen his movies that he is not even close to the versatility that his father has. He got disillusioned after giving flop movies one after another. It would be good if he would have realized his own talent as an individual and built his career in it. Similarly, a person would be so fascinated by the glamour world that he or she might dream to be the next Mr or Miss World. However, lack of looks and body would not be fit enough to make this dream come true. instead, he they might have set goal to excel in the glamour field by acting or fashion designing which would be far more practical.
Reason given by the author is that many people's dreams are inherently selfish, which is true. In our society it is observed that a doctor's son will be a doctor and an engineer's son is an engineer. In such cases, son's talent is considered inconsequential. By default his parents set his career to be what they had persuaded irrespective of their's son's talent. Also, there are cases where son things that my father was a successful business man so am I. And he ends up losing big time, empire built by his father gets perished just by this attitude of inherent dream.
In support of this here is a fine example. Dhirubhai Ambani have built empire out of his business skills, where as his son could not take it forwards and ended up into loss. There are good examples where in people followed their pragmatic dreams and succeeded in life. one example is Bill gates. He did not his company to his son. He knew his son is not as good technically as he was. rather he relegated the position of Chief executive officer to Satya Nadela, who Bill Gates analysed to be best fit. hence, today Microsoft is in safe hand.
Thus, I would like to conclude my argument in agreement with the statement that young people often receive the advice to "follow their dreams", more emphasis should be given on picking the worthy goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... that though young people often receive the advise to 'follow your dreams', more...
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Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...t though young people often receive the advise to 'follow your dreams', more...
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Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had realized'?
Suggestion: had realized
...e after another. It would be good if he would have realized his own talent as an individual and bui...
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Suggestion: Instead
...it enough to make this dream come true. instead, he they might have set goal to excel i...
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Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...e. In our society it is observed that a doctors son will be a doctor and an engineers s...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'engineers'' or 'engineer's'?
Suggestion: engineers'; engineer's
...t a doctors son will be a doctor and an engineers son is an engineer. In such cases, sons...
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Message: Did you mean: 'By default,'?
Suggestion: By default,
...s talent is considered inconsequential. By default his parents set his career to be what t...
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...uilt empire out of his business skills, where as his son could not take it forwards and ...
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Suggestion: One
...pragmatic dreams and succeeded in life. one example is Bill gates. He did not his c...
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Suggestion: Rather
...n is not as good technically as he was. rather he relegated the position of Chief exec...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: rather,
...n is not as good technically as he was. rather he relegated the position of Chief exec...
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Suggestion: Hence
...who Bill Gates analysed to be best fit. hence, today Microsoft is in safe hand. Th...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'similarly', 'so', 'thus', 'for instance']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244855967078 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.179012345679 0.157235817809 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0740740740741 0.0880659088768 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0534979423868 0.0497285424764 108% => OK
Pronouns: 0.082304526749 0.0444667217837 185% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.100823045267 0.12292977631 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0432098765432 0.0406280797675 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.45475569357 2.79330140395 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0267489711934 0.030933414821 86% => OK
Particles: 0.00205761316872 0.0016655270985 124% => OK
Determiners: 0.0555555555556 0.0997080785238 56% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0308641975309 0.0249443105267 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0205761316872 0.0148568991511 138% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2414.0 2732.02544248 88% => OK
No of words: 433.0 452.878318584 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57505773672 6.0361032391 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.29792147806 0.366273622748 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.177829099307 0.280924506359 63% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.127020785219 0.200843997647 63% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0739030023095 0.132149295362 56% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45475569357 2.79330140395 88% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 219.290929204 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524249422633 0.48968727796 107% => OK
Word variations: 60.0523035985 55.4138127331 108% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.32 23.380412469 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8973845357 59.4972553346 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.56 141.124799967 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.32 23.380412469 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.36 0.674092028746 53% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.21349557522 230% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 35.1029099307 51.4728631049 68% => OK
Elegance: 1.23529411765 1.64882698954 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302005109201 0.391690518653 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0841761692838 0.123202303941 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0774357683213 0.077325440228 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.438130565707 0.547984918172 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156108288044 0.149214159877 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905477231381 0.161403998019 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158793976381 0.0892212321368 178% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.22385740652 0.385218514788 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.092191140405 0.0692045440612 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267698972439 0.275328986314 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.23986582214 0.0653680567796 367% => Less connections among paragraphs
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.4325221239 163% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 7.22455752212 180% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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