Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the e

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

The claim that governments must ensure financial support to the major cities in order for them to thrive makes sense as the major cities reflect as to what a country is capable of producing to its optimum potential. However, the reason that it is only the cities wherein the cultural traditions are preserved may not be true in every aspect since there are a lot of factors which determine where the traditions are preserved.

To begin with, the cities represent a more modern society in terms of technological advancements and infrastructure which causes major footfall from around the world. It is the major cities that have a massive chunk of population residing in the country as there are a lot of opportunities in those cities to thrive in. There are multinational corporations, diplomats, celebrities and other VIP’s who pay a lot of their percentage of income in taxes and hence the governments should ensure that amenities are to their upmost level.

Moreover, there are a lot of tourists who come to visit these cities for various purposes and hence the financial support is needed to build such an infrastructure which wouldn’t draw them out as tourism generates a lot of income. As there are a lot of people residing in such cities there is a lot of traffic on roads, railways and to make sure that everything is sailing smoothly the government should have a fine set of individuals with appropriate budget to devise a plan out. For instance,
in an overpopulated city like Mumbai there is a significant amount of traffic problems so the government is now coming up with the metro to make sure that people do have an alternative apart from the already clogged roads and the old-fashioned railways.

In contrast, the reason stated that nation’s cultural traditions are preserved only in the cities may not be true.In fact, it is the cities which are metropolitan in nature and henceforth the only place where the culture can be really seen and felt are the villages and small towns. It is these towns who have certain sects of people staying in groups which actually reflect the culture’s diversity and they maintain the integrity. it would be pure injustice to small towns if the government doesnt support them financially as it is these small towns that have a higher rate of poverty and other evils such as malnutrition and higher mortality rates.

To conclude, the cities are a major part of society for various reasons and financial support is a major factor in determining that. But, the small towns cannot be ignored as they are the ones who actually reflect the true image of the cultural diversity and not cities who are metropolitan in nature and whose culture gets dissolved in time. Ultimately, both are equally important in determining the overall success of the society in different aspects.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, apart from, as to, for instance, in contrast, in fact, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95407098121 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84986808022 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450939457203 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.2319111518 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.5 118.986275619 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2142857143 23.4991977007 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 5.21951772744 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362226128969 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126470416912 0.0831039109588 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814824332854 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188075027512 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101096460359 0.0667264976115 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.1392134831 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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