Claim:Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason:It is primarily in cities that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

There are certain considerations one can take into account when considering and investigating the distribution of government financial support. The statement claims that big cities should receive sufficient support, for the reason that it is the main source of a country's culture. However, I assert that while financial support to metropolitans are of vital importance for their development, rural areas are also un-ignorable, for countrysides also contribute to the traditions of a nation, even greater than cities.

The statement maintains that cities are of central importance for a nation's cultural innovation and preservation, thus opulent financial support must be provided for their development. This is quite true to some developed countries in the world. For instance, if one goes to New York, everything he or she encountered there, including the music, food, people's lifestyle, are of typically American. These factors are all dispensable components of American culture we know. Thus, it is reasonable to support the thriving of big cities in the US for the country's cultural development as a whole.

From this perspective, this claim seems quite appealing. However, for some countries, this situation can be different. The claim assumes that cities are primarily where a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated, which is not true for all countries. For example, in China, while cities are developing more and more quickly, countrysides are still places where traditional culture flourishes. Many traditional skills such as paper-cutting, are mastered by elderly people who has been living in the rural areas for decades. If these areas are neglected by the government, the chances are these perish traditions will go extinct one day. Obviously, financing big cities are not enough for traditional cultural preservation in China.

Furthermore, quite contrary to the statement, thriving of cities can have bad effects in traditional cultures. With the rapid trend of globalization and the more and more accelerated advancement of technology, modern lifestyles are becoming prevalent, and cities around world are much alike due to communication. Beijing, London and New York share the similar building style, young people in these cities all like pop music. In Beijing, one can easily find western restaurant, and in London, the vice versa. While we are excited by the comfort and convenient brought about by internalization, our traditional culture are endangered at the same time. People in large cities are forgetting traditions, needless to say preserve them. It is obvious that the development of cities are always counteracting with tradition preservation. From this perspective, the government should not invest money to the cities in order to preserve the nation's traditions.

Due to the aforementioned ground, although it is undeniable that cities can be a nation's cultural center, other parts of the country are also home to rich cultures, especially traditional ones. I firmly believe supporting major cities financially is not enough for tradition preservation. Every part of the nation where traditions rooted should be protected.

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Average: 7.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a nation; nations
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, thus, while, as for, for example, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2696.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5587628866 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13507849753 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529896907216 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 852.3 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4137455406 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.692307692 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6538461538 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96153846154 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354453134431 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102035076044 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832756740336 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205717776359 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0122344432645 0.0667264976115 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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